~ Oneness

~ Oneness, E.L. Elisa Laura, Fantasy, Desert, Love, Spirits, Spiritual, Mind Travels

~ Oneness

 

To be in one place so

Connected to everything

Where your body dances

With the warm wind

And your senses do excite,

I felt your roots

 

As if your ghost swirled

In this life through each element

And not could commit a touch

But as free as the grains of sand

in my hair

I hear you whispering

 

My great love

Back to your roots

I walk the long visual desert

Into your green eyes,

And you follow my trusty odor

I am one with you

 

The sun in my back,

Oases stretched out

I dance your heartbeat

Where it leaves me to

Bring you happiness

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Quill~]

I love this stanza, as much as this whole poem. But this stanza stands out to me. It's in the eyes where we see through each other's soul. I love the visual walk you gave me through your eyes to his. Awesome write!

"My great love

Back to your roots

I walk the long visual desert

Into your green eyes,

And you follow my trusty odor

I am one with you"

Thank you so much for this exceptional review, I like how you picked it up, in a "he" :) you're brilliant dear poetess. X

[Quill~]

one would have to be masculine to follow your beauty, Ms. Elisa. ;)

Now I wonder if the dessert is masculine too.... I think so. :) thank you for all tonight overhere, dear Quill, go sleep for a while, speak to you soon ok! xx

[Quill~]

ok...I need to spend time with my date...he's feeling ignored! lol
I'll be back to read more! X

Ooooh haha, yes you should dear.... don't let your date wait, for chatting with me ;-) have the most wonderful time sweetie X :D

[Quill~]

I will...he's pouting, but he'll get over it. ;)
Ciao Bella!

Aw, my greetings to both.... Ciao Tesoro, ti voglio molto bene! Ci vediamo domani. Eli x

[Quill~]

Grazie!

:-) Di niente... a presto! baci

[Deuces]

Sounds like the place we'd all want to be.

Hi Cyntax, thanks for popping in on this one :)

[Deuces]

My pleasure. 'Tis what I do :)

:-)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi there! such generous and observant messages here, I love the way you make me stop and ponder for ages, the first stanza is just brilliant, so deep so unique very nicely written, very well done

Hi sweetheart, thank you so much for all your reviews... so happy to see them on sunday :) I'm thankful to you!

[Corset]

omg..I love love love this I love that video, one of my alltime favorites! Ellie!! How did you know I needed this :P sweetness , this is beautiful! Thank you for writing this my sister friend.

Oh love, I knew ;-) When I whirl, around, and can't land like now yet, I need escapes.... mind travels, the cold winter here makes me... I am so glad we together did fly a bit :) Hugs sweet sister and much love X will be back a little later :D x

[Corset]

You are so amazing. XOX we did fly for a moment in here, thank you :)

Yes!!! that is perfect! :) so are you perfect poetess xxx

[CreativeStroke]

The imagery was astounding, full of beauty. We all long to have that oneness with the world and even with others. The serenity and peacefulness in the contentment of that feeling. This was a beautifully crafted piece!

Thank you so much CreativeStroke :) glad you enjoyed the mind travel :D

[CreativeStroke]

You are very welcome!

:-)

[Mark]

To be in that special place of being connected, the place that makes you whole, a true being, connected to another and between the two of you is formed something greater. Very feeling read.

Thank you so much Mark :)

[Mark]

You're welcome.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Lovely, lovely magic you have weaved in this piece Sis!...I am bewitched as many readers here. The thought of going to a distant place where the desert of your soul is an oasis, is mystifying! This sates the thirst for love and passion on a higher level. Thank you for taking my mind there..

"As if your ghost swirled

In this life through each element

And not could commit a touch

But as free as the grains of sand

in my hair

I hear you whispering"~Such an exquisite spiritual voyage Eli!! Love this!~XOXO~

Oh what a beautiful review sis! goosebumps by your words.... you always do feel it so well! :) thank you with whole my heart dearest ♥

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Thank you for writing this...it gave "me" goosebumps!... love it!XXXX

I'm so honored by your words love... so happy I could take you with me! XXX :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I will most definitely come back and read more...my favorite Poetess! (((hug)))

Awww.. *blush* :) xoxo and big hug!!! ♥

[Inda]

This is beauty in words, you've said so much in here in such simple; accessible vocabulary, really like this one!

Oh thank you so much my dear friend. I so appreciate you. :)

[kublakhan27]

Your imagery is sensuous, even transcendental...swirling ghosts and deserts into your eyes...wonderful stuff, I love it :)

I feel so honored to have you by my friend, that means a lot you picked it up that way, brilliant yourself! :) thank you x

[kublakhan27]

You're welcome Elisa, those feelings are unequivocally mutual :)

:-)

[kublakhan27]

:)

[David Scott]

Oneness... If only we could find it and become truly one... If only... But then, what about me and I and you and self actualization...? I'm sure it's all one in the same. ;)
Actually playing the devils advocate. I've felt this and it is heaven on Earth.
A lovely and tender poem. Thank you for sharing.

As long as we are all just those lovely little dusty particles, on heavens earth, we breath the same air, love, life, and happiness, :) It was for me not the devils advocate but the advocate of justice in wisdom, and feelers of science. Thank you for your words, David. Beautiful as always.

*breathe, typed to quickly...