~ This Night

~ This Night, back in the mind, time, travel, you, me, we, love, rain, kiss

~ This Night

 

A long day resulted extended

In a drive along the busy

Streets with the green and red light

Reflected in every raindrop

My thoughts so full

Your thoughts even fuller

 

Doubly linked; not knowing

The tears of our universe

So utterly needed, and respected,

But also seen as our agony

United by fate, loved by skin

In dense thoughts slightly loosened

 

Where is the days council? so far away?

If our threads never separate

On the early morning sun

And our place is wet from the rain

A love felt in mid, through each journey

And by ground so unfinished ...

 

By growing in each flowering

Breath of life, each cell of our brain

Any thoughts flowing like water

And the days are numbered, but never counted out

In infinite minds like we share…

Though I'm halfway determined

 

Back roads are impossible

Ways forward, not good enough, yet…

The roads through the side? the side window?

Yes, I found you on my way to what I missed

And you found me, we accepted

The Northern rain this night

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Music: Ketty Lester

Just the real vision I had tonight.... x

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

"A long day resulted extended" yes, like those long summer days, when the sun slowly goes down for what seems like hours... Like lovers, trying to extend a kiss so they won't have to say goodbye just yet... And to avoid a fight, those "The tears of our universe", because when love is threatened, it feels like it's the whole world that is in danger. But in the water, in each drop of the warm summer rain, arguments can be washed away, and emotions can be renewed, reborn... Happiness is not found on a highway that makes you save time, but in these "The roads through the side? the side window?"... But rather on a long, appreciated detour toward what matter most. More dust on that road, but through that dust resides hope.... I really enjoyed reading this one Elisa, like so many of yours, it's full of superb imagery and just a feast of imagination and words... Well done ! 100/100

I feel so honored with your reviews JP, just wonderful how you enjoyed this... I wanted this write to give an "old" feel, and you know a typical cinema touch... so glad you enjoyed this :) :) :)

And I see I enjoyed it twice lol... ;) over enthausiastic me...

[sithlordjp]

some things are worth enjoying twice, like my mother spaghetti sauce for example !!! ;)

Oh Yummy!!! mum's spaghetti saus! I bet she can cook like an angel :)

[MOON]

Mesmerising write of the rain love and the roads travelled, beautiful Elisa.

Thanks Moon :)

[Corset]

Where is the days council? so far away?
If our threads never separate
On the early morning sun
And our place is wet from the rain
A love felt in mid, through each journey
And by ground so unfinished ...

By growing in each flowering
Breath of life, each cell of our brain
Any thoughts flowing like water
And the days are numbered, but never counted out
In infinite minds like we share…


Inside your poems are many other poems, all of which remind me to breathe and focus, not on the past and it's darkened path but on the future where love is like a sonnet on the breeze, and every spirit of love whispers "Elisa knows your heart, go read, go and be liquid dear" lol.

Haha, wow, dear, thank you so much for your words... you're like me, a writer with mazes into mazes, love in love, and friendship in friendship, it is neverending, I think... it is like eternity, immortal :) muwah for this lovely review xx

[Corset]

Always the best part of my day Ellie :)

:) ~ xoxo ~

[Tree]

There is something about the rain that draws lovers in tight. And when I think of life and love it is all part of the journey; the road, the road you have written about. In the last stanza of your poem you write about the idea that the journey does not have to be relegated to a single road ––––with a single direction––––but there are side streets, too. With false starts, and rest areas. Love is complicated, no?
A wonderful set of analogies and metaphors Elli. Thank you for allowing us to hitch a ride, onto your journey:)

Thank you very much Diego, Oh, this review is beautiful, love is so complicated, but once solved, into a meeting point, it is unbreakable (I think). But there can be always side streets, love is a maze of itself. :) thanks for your encouriging words, and lovely review my friend and bro :)

[Pax]

dearest friend, I find this really beautiful in the ways of love, on the way road and rain... Rain have such a romantic feel to it that makes it mesmerizing electrifying our skin making through our heart then to the mind... having an electric urge to feel love... and you have done it here...

Wonderful work my friend!

Oh Pax, thank you so much for these words... :) yes, my sign is water I guess... I have something with it... haha :) xx to my best!

[Frieda P]

A perfect write for a rainy night/day, filled with turmoil and questions. Why is the rain causes us o reflect so deeply, I wonder. I can read it in your words and your thoughts here. Lot's of frustration but yet a comforting read, I guess that's what rain does.

'And the days are numbered, but never counted out'

Your poetry always speaks to me Eli...I love that line, love the entire read. Brava my friend.

Frieda, dear, thank you so much.... I'm so sorry I'm not that talkative lately... I will be soon. (too much on the mind) xo your words always bring me joy! my good friend... Grazie tesoro xx

[emmajoy]

' Yes, I found you on my way to what I missed ~ And you found me.. '

'Colours glowing in the rain, streams filtering the greens and reds, rainbows flickering on earth .. tis beautiful. And there you are with roving thoughts and feelings about that other person, precious in every way and at every moment. What amazingly vivid pictures you portray, Elisa! Love it, as you know i would.

Thanks luv, you're the bestest! ♥ always in my thoughts, and heart sweet Em X

[Inda]

Very romantic, sweet and passionate. A bit of fate and love and acceptance; which are not always mutually bound. Great piece!

Thank you my dear friend. You bring me a smile from ear to ear :)

[Nick.B]

Interesting poem you managed to pin here, with a beautiful imaginary...love the ending...love is making them still live...great write

Thank you very much Nick :)

[CS]

Great job on the contrast between the traffic lights and the Northern lights, Eli. It gave me the visual of two people shining like the aurora borealis in the rain, light refracting off of the wet pavement, swirling together. That is some beautiful imagery. It reminds me that even on those busy, dreary days, when we can only focus on the road ahead of us, we should still check our peripherals because love can be hiding right beside us.
Lovely poetry, sis. Even in the rain, you still shine like a star :)

Yes, sister, I knew you would compare that to the Aurora Borealis, my star :) and you remember me of that write I need to construct... thank you so much, your insights, are always precisely what I was thinking too... nice to see you around sis. X

[Joe]

Whow Nice One Elisa!

Fav Lines:

"Back roads are impossible
Ways forward, not good enough, yet…
The roads through the side? the side window?
Yes, I found you on my way to what I missed
And you found me" / Hmmmm Lovely Thoughtchain!

Enjoyed! :)

Thank you so much dear Gabriel. :) I will come back for your artworks :)