~ Endless

Endless, E.L. Elisa laura, Poetry

 

~ Endless

 

 

The road was difficult

Days without light

Suffocating narrowness

Claustrophobic smallness

Little breath

 

Wandering in

The last pure power

A living dream

An endless battle

The metamorphosis

 

Now from the mountain looking

On the doomed fields

The landscape without water

The grim without hope

No light in sight, ever ~

 

Wings were spread

Senses sharp

The eagle left

While marking his footsteps

On the snowy top

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Just wanna say first off that the picture really helps visualize this piece and that the third stanza really helps describe the picture. It's always tough to feel as if we have no hope or no way of resovling our problems. A world without light would then depend on darkness. A world without problems would depend on peace and harmony. If at all, we always have to depend on something along the road.

Yes, thank you. I've been through that... Traveling helpt a lot... That's why my heart is my compass. Thank you dear friend.

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

That's an interesting way to look at it, a heart as your compass...

It's what I've learned to listen closely too ~ Thank you again :)

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

You are very welcome :) And I also love the title of this by the way!

Thank you so much dear :-) always happy to have you by

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Welcome :) Anytime!

[Pax]

i keep reading this... and i always see a person who is preparing for a long journey of challenges and changes withing self knowing and self exploring the depths of endless puzzle...
a bit dark but a strong piece...
wonderful work yet again my dearest friend!

Thank you so much hun! :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Heavy write, Elisa. So very stark, but so, so beautiful at the same time.

Thank you dear friend, yes, this one is real, it was real.... halfway December... as winter gives me the most pure thoughts. :) glad you could enjoy it.

[Night]

...very nice, well written...a spiritual journey...begining to end....then there is more.:)

Always, yes... my friend, thank you :)

[KurKota]

I am not sure if this piece or you even need another review, but I mostly just want to add my compliments to a very nice piece. 'The additional video adds to it, but maybe I am just being old school here, but to me the purpose of poetry is to "paint the mental picture"...and if it is successful a visual aid, so to speak, seems contra indicated and seems almost a statement of insecurity of the work...... but just my very humble opinion expressed, not a judgement of the effort. Good job!

Don't worry, I appreciate your honesty, and I'm old school too. I just listen always to music, 24/7 and when I hiked this song was on, so I merge it with the poetry of the vivid moment. I know what you mean with that. Some are without music on my page... some are with. As I do love variety and the whole picture, (I had with it, and I felt with it) Much appreciated you came here. Thank you.

[KurKota]

Thanks for your response..... I really do like your work.... and understand the blending, Great!

I will check out yours soon... when I'm a little less tired! :-) I already saw brilliant things... but for each and everyone I do love to take time....

[KurKota]

May I friend you ?

Yes, I've already accepted you :-) may we share lot's of inspiration! thank you for the request.

[Eloha]

The 2nd stanza was exceptional, I liked the music and concept of this. Really clean execution.

Thank you so much :-)

[Nautili]

I Like the somber feel coupled with the symbol of freeedom at the end, the eagle ready for flight. There is a sense of darkness and confusion, but unexpectedly comes the hope, lighting the way, which is such a buoy to the forlorn soul.

Thank you dear Nautili, and also for your wonderful mail... about dreams. It are all interesting subjects, :) your words here are captivating. Much appreciated dear.

[Tree]

Your message is creatively captured in your poem, music, and visual art. Inspired, I stayed a while

Diego

Thanks Diego, I'm happy you did :-)
Eli

[J. J. Nightingale]

No man can know of lonely flight
No man has seen forever night
Take me with you
Away from this toil
Give me peace
On top of the world ..


The video is perfect .. beautiful fitting music ..
Your words, well chosen .. My heart is calm ... Jazz

Thank you for your most loveble and heartfelt words Jazz, they calm me too, It is a write of December 2012, I'm so glad you felt it. Hugs!

[CS]

Wow, Eli, those moments we feel lost in that space.....you have said it so well. It is like searching around forever looking for that oasis. I really like the imagery, both of the picture of mazes, and in your words. The snow makes it seem more frozen...more vast. And the Eagle, looking over this scene, watching with its keen eyes....so interesting. I really like this, my friend. It leaves me with a feeling of emptiness but calm. Very nice work!

Oh I'm so glad you could feel this with me Courtney. You know sometimes we have those moments... Good it gave you the calm feeling, as I was kind of numb in pain myself when I wrote it, I'm glad I could bring that over... Thank you dear. :)

[CS]

I understand that numbness, Eli. But there is still much beauty in this piece. You are so welcome :)

Thank you for saying that, and seeing that.... it means much to me sister... :-)

[Bridgid Persephone Newm..]

And that is how we will leave this place

Thank you very much for your time and review...