~ Endless

Endless, E.L. Elisa laura, Poetry

 

~ Endless

 

 

The road was difficult

Days without light

Suffocating narrowness

Claustrophobic smallness

Little breath

 

Wandering in

The last pure power

A living dream

An endless battle

The metamorphosis

 

Now from the mountain looking

On the doomed fields

The landscape without water

The grim without hope

No light in sight, ever ~

 

Wings were spread

Senses sharp

The eagle left

While marking his footsteps

On the snowy top

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Just wanna say first off that the picture really helps visualize this piece and that the third stanza really helps describe the picture. It's always tough to feel as if we have no hope or no way of resovling our problems. A world without light would then depend on darkness. A world without problems would depend on peace and harmony. If at all, we always have to depend on something along the road.

Yes, thank you. I've been through that... Traveling helpt a lot... That's why my heart is my compass. Thank you dear friend.

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

That's an interesting way to look at it, a heart as your compass...

It's what I've learned to listen closely too ~ Thank you again :)

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

You are very welcome :) And I also love the title of this by the way!

Thank you so much dear :-) always happy to have you by

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Welcome :) Anytime!

[Deuces]

You're right. This does parallel the thoughts conveyed in my piece. Except yours is calm and unnerving... it displays a portal of transition to the unknown. Frightening, yet intriguing. A unique writer you are.

Thank you dear friend, I had a near death experience, last June... after I wrote this, when I felt strong enough, my write, ~ The Voice of Silence, was a second one. It for me personally was a transition, into better worlds, back to earth. So that explains the feeling a bit I hope for you, and so are you dear friend, connected we are.

- Elisa

[sithlordjp]

I got lost in these words for a moment... But the best part is, I wasn't in a hurry to find my way back. I walked around, with my thoughts, with your words: "Wandering in / The last pure power" like you said... Well done, and thanks for sharing.

Thank you very much :)

[ObscurityNone]

This reminds me of an elongated Haiku; very nicely conveyed, the scene.

It could be one, split up all in 5-7-5 syllables, but I was just carving the moment I guess :) and not paying attention at any rule.... thank you so much hermanito. :D

[Renée]

a hard journey...but we grow from them and when we do ... we fly higher because of the strength & endurance we gained.... great job Elise !

Thank you sweet Renée :)

[s y e]

This was absolutely beautiful dear! The words were so powerful and the flow was great! Well done and very moving fantastic piece! xox

Thank you so very much :) dear xx

[s y e]

Anytime sweetie xox

:) xx

[s y e]

:-D xox

[Inda]

This is uplifting, no pun intended. Relaxing imagery that saddens me in the end, but in a good way.
Feels like the journal of a traveler; a lonely one.
Great piece!

You felt that very well Inda. I was with my husband on travel, but This one I walked alone...
You felt that. Otherwise no time to write, as this profoundly. ( Too distracted). Thank you so much dear.

[Inda]

Yes the loneliness of the poet is real and often times necessary.

Yes, it is.... it is..... and it is wonderful to be lonely now and then, it opens doors, richer visions, perspectives.... all that couldn't be seen while walking together....

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

A true time of transition, described perfectly.

Thank you so much m'lady :) so good to see you again welcome back xx

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

slowly~but~surely...here I come. ;) missed you and you writings!

I'm so happy you are back, even when slowly, please take all the time you need... your writings are always so beautiful. :) xxx

[David Scott]

Dang! I'm sitting here with my hands swollen and my nerves on fire feeling like this Hell is endless. Nothing ever seems to change. The Eagle soars but lands and digs in with sharp talons...
Your writing my heart out in black and white today! Your like a fairy godmother. Ha

Oh sigh, and geez, thank you, I made you feel it so profound, I must admit this was a real sentiment... I was hiking, in the mountains, lately... and wrote this. While I faced the most difficult periode of my life. Thank you dear friend.... You know I can write hell, hence your funny write lately LOL :D

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Wow...just like the migration story via the land bridge from up there to north america...
u made me see the flashback of a novel i read....

Really? that is great, Which novel? I'm curious now.... this write I wrote while hiking. :) Thank you so much P.K. for your review, and time... I will be back for your work!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/People_of_the_Wolf

Thank you so very much my friend, yes, I know this story and book, I will pick it up at my fathers home soon, (he has all) and I always wanted to read this... thanks for reminding me. :D

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

sure...do read the whole series...

I will, thank you..

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

im sure u will remember

:-) That makes me smile, now I get it....

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

yeh

[Traci]

What a wonderful piece of work, Elisa. From the picture to the music you helped me visualize what were words were capturing. Your creativity took me on the journey. Thanks for such a powerful, thought provoking piece, loved it.

Thank you very much VITD, for your review, and the time to read me. :)

[Traci]

You're quite welcome, I look forward to reading more of your work, as I am sure it will be as wonderful as this piece :)

Thank you, that means a lot to me! I've read your piece, and it's beautiful, very impressive! :-)