~ Winter Valley

Winter, Winter Thoughts, Season, E.L. Elisa Laura

~ Winter Valley

 

 

Small frozen particles

Become a cold blanket

Merged into a winter desert

 

White clouds on the ground

Of perfection and balance

The broad waves of the valley

 

Dancing along the terrestrial

Structure... under which secrets

Are sleeping, a season long...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

I think this is my favorite one of yours so far. You were able to achieve a complete picture with your words, you really took me there. I saw the snow, felt the cold. The stillness of the whole landscape. When snow covers everything, are the screts beneath being buried, or slowly exposed? When all colors dissapear under a white coat, must we finally confront what is in that "valley"... I mean, wasn't that the whole point of The Girl With the Dragon Tattoo? "Small frozen particles" all weaving a larger picture... You write beautifully, it's a great joy to browse through your work.

Indeed or slowly exposed... it's a winters mystery. I like that. Thank you for picking so much interesting things out... :) pleasure to read your reviews . :)

[sithlordjp]

you are quite welcome.

:-)

[Everett DeValle]

I've always enjoyed winter, just a perfect time to write like its my writing season...I love when poets like yourself put a lot of thought into their presentation...it makes your words come alive, and no less, your words of poetry are sublime. Nicely done, Elisa.

~Ev

Thank you so much Ev :-) coming from you it's always a pleasure!

[Everett DeValle]

You are so very welcome, Eli. :)

P.s. :) It's my season too... I don't loathe never.... best one for inspiration

[Jack...]

A found this to be very inspiring and beautiful. The poem, the picture, one and the same. Very well written.

Thank you with whole my heart, glad you felt it Jack.... :-)

[Samuel Pennell]

This is good! I have to be totally hoest, and say that it does remind me a little bit of my poem that I wrote last week, "Winter's Dark Chamber," though.

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/samspennell/1097106/

I hope you don't mind me saying that. The text seems pretty different, but the core sentiment feels kind of the same.

Thank you Samuel for your time and review, I will check yours out!

[Quill~]

Thoughts of winter is in the air. I feel it in my bones. You write so peacefully. I love the calm emotion, the tranquility you bring to this. Excellent!

I'm so grateful to have you and your thoughts by... thank you dear Quill xx

[Quill~]

:) You're welome.

[Corset]

very beautiful and zen like, it feels like a peaceful sleep, just a few more minutes and then we'll wake up spring mmmm one or two more cozy fires first for the lovers :)

Yes beautiful Corset, that is so well felt..... X :) thank you

[emman]

The background music adds coldness to the poem.. :) nice selection..

It is, so nice you noticed, you have musical ears... Happy to hear, thanks

[emman]

Hmmm..how did put the background music?

You've got mail about that ;-)

[emman]

oh thank you :-)

[emman]

-white clouds on the ground
of perfection and balance...this gave me a powerful impact..

Nicely written! :)

:) thank you so much ...

[Clockwork]

I love what snow does to a landscape. When all of those different ice crystals come together, they form a beauty that you have eloquently described here. Now I wish there was snow in my part of the world. Ah, and the secrets that lie beneath! A good end to a beautiful winter landscape.

Thank you very much my friend nice review :)

[Renée]

another world it is...nicely captured E.L.

Thank you dear Renée :) glad you enjoyed!

[Horizon K.]

Oh lovely! My mind is warmly running with beautiful images of pristine snow but my body is shivering with my imagined cold. And I love the last verse!! Hope it's not too cold where you are!

Thank you so much dearest, it is getting colder, but I so love it, how colder how better, (But WITH SUN :D:D:D) not with rain.... :) best hiking weather, and after to eat pancakes.... ( a traditional Dutch thingy) not the once for breakfast but larger ones, and also with " savory ingredients " yum! :-) I love your review thanks for being around love!

[Horizon K.]

Oh that sounds so yummy!! What are those pancakes called? And I love the chill of winter too! Though where I am, there is no snow, and not do cold compared to other places... And did I tell you yet how much of a sweetheart you are!!!

We call it not so different from English, as Dutch is quite simular, we call it: " Pannekoeken" Pan = Pan like in English Koek = Cookie So cookies baked in the amazing pan lol :D:D:D You're such a sweetheart too! Love to you dear friend! hugs

[Horizon K.]

Sounds yummy! Now I'm wanting some savory pannekoeken!

Hahahah I bring you some dearest!!!
You can google the word, "pannekoeken" lol it is funny I did it just now myself... hahaha, I'm hungry now :D love to you! till soon honey

[Horizon K.]

oh... I'm going to make this! And I couldn't see when I was on my phone, but you have a snowy Ginkakuji!

Thank you dear, "ginkakuji" yes, so love you name it... it are those wonderful caracteristic homes... I always am in love with Japan, (well whole Asia) for roots are there, and I'm planning a trip with my love...

When you have some good recipes, please pass them :-) I do love to cook, and try new things... worldish things...

[Horizon K.]

Oh, have fun there! Ive been to Japan several times & I love it!! And I've seen Ginkakuji, though not covered in snow like this.

Oh I'm so jealous! ahaha, :) great you have. It's one of my dreams, (day - dreams) still... but we go soon... especially in snow it is magnificent I guess...

*but I'm living in the Netherlands dear, it's a long his(tory)... I will explain you all one day, why I am where I am. xxx