~ I just freeze slowly

E.L. Poetry, Elisa Laura, Love, Hurt, Lost, Sad, Pain, Truth, Heartfelt, Dying, Death, Gone

~ I just freeze slowly

In love’s breath

Where I’m lost

And will not find

My key nor 

Silver lines to see

 

I just freeze slowly

Of hurt, and lost

Interwoven

In my eternity

 

The moon is cold

She can’t shine no more

For days from now on

As she misses her love

 

The sea is wild to give a sign

On tides not in equality

Where sand is raw

And dark within denials reality

 

I will be eclipsed forever soon

As I’ve spoken my heart

I can’t go on shining

While I’m inner dying

 

The Universe is changing

And sings different notes

For what she felt within the signs

Where pure clairvoyance floats

 

And it’s no choice it’s a fact

A heart reasons dialect

The time for me has come

I will be moving on

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

I played this tonight....
XxXx

Reviews

[Kenaz]

I'm sorry for your loss, but I am glad that you have come back (at least further) out of the moonlight. Though you undoubtedly learned some truths out there in the darkness. I felt a stillness and cold come over my heart reading this. It really hit me hard when you said that you couldn't see the silver lining. Really really fantastic this one, and I am glad that we have some similarities in our music. I hope that things have gotten better from this low point!

Thank you T. for this amazing review, (didn't expect it) the better it salutes me in my early morning.... :) You're really kind, things have gone way better, through the last year.... at least, like I told you, I don't want to see myself there ;) (((HUGS)))

[MOON]

Absolutely poignant beautiful write , the picture the sadness and yet affirming write. Go well Elisa .

Thank you sweet friend xx

[Patrick]

how strange that with the cool, aqua colour scheme you have produced something so warm, so engrossing and so loveable...brilliant

Thank you P.J. :)

[Pax]

I'm overwhelmed on how profound this piece really meant... so I'm speechless... i felt your strong soulful swim in this grieving process... as always be well and be strong... Your friends and me are just here listening... believing in you that you can...

Pax the way you're a friend is sublime! thank you for always believing in me... xx

[Corset]

Ellie, your words bring tears to my eyes, to think of you not fully in your heart, to think of you cold fills me with such sadness, you must laugh again to warm yourself, too much has happened of late, you must keep positive for your health, I think a part of me would break too, if you did. You are the strongest woman I know, don't let grief pull you away from us. please. oxoxox

Thank you dear soul and dear friend, your feelers rich beyond most. I want to thank you for your clear insight on many on here.
I'm definitely strong, and I never let me say things by someone,
Who actually don't know me, but pretend they do. I'm
Only in a mourning period, of my grandfather, and dealing with this, in the periode I'm silent. I became aware of many feelings, but I'm never lost... those who talk about that,
Are lost themselves. And interpret that in their own lost
Or lonelyness ... It's sad to see, I don't get the freedom to mourn,
Before some interpret it as if I ever wear heels... hate them!
Casual is my style ;) you know me, and like me and my jeans...
The one for whom I have written this, know this personally.
Knows me personally. He knows. That's what count's for me.
I will come back for you sis, and for some real good friends on here...

Love and miss you.

XoXoXo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

"I will be eclipsed forever soon

As I’ve spoken my heart

I can’t go on shining

While I’m inner dying



The Universe is changing

And sings different notes

For what she felt within the signs

Where pure clairvoyance floats



And it’s no choice it’s a fact

A heart reasons dialect

The time for me has come

I will be moving on"~What an amazing write!...this truly brings a world of hurt to my heart, as I read this. Your universal message of loss and hurt resonates through this piece. I hope that expressing this emotion will release you from your pain, to heal.~xoxo~

Thank you closest one to my heart! I love you, and I will be ok, after this mourning periode... I promise to come back for you always too! xoxo, enjoy your time, you're always in my heart. Will mail you soon X

[KAOlmsted]

E...there you go, turning pain into a beautiful work of art, so lovely I am envious of your grief, and then, at the end, that bold voice: "I will be moving on." No question. No doubt. Not "I think I might be moving on now..." No! "I WILL BE MOVING ON!" Fantastic. Truly well done. Thank you so much for sharing this with us.

Thank you honestly Kimmer, for your intellect, and heartfelt words... I am in pain, and it will be all better soon... I hope

[KAOlmsted]

I hope, too...

[DrD]

Poems of lamentation are always special in their intensity and dept of feeling. You have demonstrated that very well here and proven that our most consuming feelings bring unique inspirations. A marvelous work.

Thank you for seeing that my friend. I try to leave here for a while, but all the good poets keep on returning ha!

[lost girl]

I always have such tremendous feelings when I enter into your gallery. It is truly a palace of art and beauty! since wandering the halls i have been heartbroken, relieved, amused, swooned, speechless, joyful, passionate, intrigued...and so much more! This piece is so spiritual it makes me weep. Haunting in essence.....ty for the escape.

Thank you dear one, your words make me smile in my pain a bit again....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

beautiful words.

"the moon is cold"---nice irony since we think of it lighting the night and warming our soul.

Thank you J.

[Jordan's Back]

I am overwhelmed with a sense of Awe and whimsy over this piece I just cant produce the Words to describe this. Its utterly Flawless.

Thank you really, that means a lot

[Jordan's Back]

no Thank you, Their are few times I get rendered absolutely speechless

I got too, this was one of my most special writes...

[Jordan's Back]

I agree and the images were an awesome select