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~ I just freeze slowly

~ I just freeze slowly

A Poem by
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E.L. Poetry, Elisa Laura, Love, Hurt, Lost, Sad, Pain, Truth, Heartfelt, Dying, Death, Gone

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~ I just freeze slowly



In love’s breath

Where I’m lost

And will not find

My key nor 

Silver lines to see

 

I just freeze slowly

Of hurt, and lost

Interwoven

In my eternity

 

The moon is cold

She can’t shine no more

For days from now on

As she misses her love

 

The sea is wild to give a sign

On tides not in equality

Where sand is raw

And dark within denials reality

 

I will be eclipsed forever soon

As I’ve spoken my heart

I can’t go on shining

While I’m inner dying

 

The Universe is changing

And sings different notes

For what she felt within the signs

Where pure clairvoyance floats

 

And it’s no choice it’s a fact

A heart reasons dialect

The time for me has come

I will be moving on

 



 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2012


Author's Note



I played this tonight....
XxXx

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I'm sorry for your loss, but I am glad that you have come back (at least further) out of the moonlight. Though you undoubtedly learned some truths out there in the darkness. I felt a stillness and cold come over my heart reading this. It really hit me hard when you said that you couldn't see the silver lining. Really really fantastic this one, and I am glad that we have some similarities in our music. I hope that things have gotten better from this low point!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you T. for this amazing review, (didn't expect it) the better it salutes me in my early mornin.. read more



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Very Romantic, (which is my favorite poetic genre). It reminds me of a poem "Art though pale for weariness." I love the relationship between moon and ocean and undersea tides. Excellent poem Elisa.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I will check out that poem. Great you give me something to read. I'm glad you e.. read more
Just as you are, your work carries a gentle grace!
I found this be profoundly moving, as this expression flowed through my heart.
I hold you in my spirits care in meditation as you process this sorrow.
Sending my Love to You {Eli} ~ xx


Posted 11 Years Ago


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11 Years Ago

Thank you dearest Judi, hope all is well with you xx till we meet again ♥
*** Hey Jude***

11 Years Ago

Every meeting is "sweeter" dear Elise. Even in time of sorrow {you} inspire!
~ Gentle hugs ~
Such beautiful words from a pained place.

"I will be eclipsed forever soon
As I’ve spoken my heart
I can’t go on shining
While I’m inner dying" - I know a feeling such as this, although I do not know the circumstances that brought you to pen it. There is a lonely place I know, full of hurt and darkness...

"The time for me has come
I will be moving on" - sometimes from need, or for survival, or for growth...the moving on is seldom simple, or easy no matter the impetus.

The pain in this is intense, yet purely penned. Your work is from the heart, and resonates.



Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you lovely, you will find out when you've read, "No more Roots" A lot of mixed feelings escape.. read more
Shimmerbliss/CAF

11 Years Ago

I will read on...take time to nurture yourself...your strength is evident, but deep pain needs atten.. read more

11 Years Ago

♥ Your heart is warm, I do love your words, thank you.... x
Best poem I have ever seen. I am very impressed. This just completed my day. Thank you.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Deep Namaste for your words, and thank you ....

11 Years Ago

All with me is a story... from beginning to the end...
It takes a great soul to embrace all seasons of Life. You are one of those, dear one. You know it and you can express it beautifully.
I'm so grateful I may share this virtual space with you.
Be well. I know you will.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

You're a true treasure. We breathing the same air... Thank you for your visions.
Beautiful write.......

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you...
The raw luster of purity in note- a devine writing of a true and honest old soul.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you x
Kimberly "Melody" Carney

11 Years Ago

Thank you for writing it! ;)
your poem is very powerful, theres a delicacy and beauty in the words that are so meaningful. love all your work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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11 Years Ago

Thank you very much Nic, for your beautiful words :)
sad and beautiful feeling...melancholy of the nature is inside of us and opposite, we are like little galaxies, everything has resonanse above our beings..so gentle and sad piece!
xx No♥r ~


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

11 Years Ago

Thank you my sweet friend ♥
I LOVE THIS PEICE!!!!!! the music and the poem its my favourite one to play!!!
and about the poem: it's beautiful, from start to end, it flows nicely, and i loved how it ends well donw!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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11 Years Ago

Thank you very much.

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Tags: E.L. Poetry, Elisa Laura, Love, Hurt, Lost, Sad, Pain, Truth, Heartfelt, Dying, Death, Gone

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