~ I just freeze slowly

E.L. Poetry, Elisa Laura, Love, Hurt, Lost, Sad, Pain, Truth, Heartfelt, Dying, Death, Gone

~ I just freeze slowly

In love’s breath

Where I’m lost

And will not find

My key nor 

Silver lines to see

 

I just freeze slowly

Of hurt, and lost

Interwoven

In my eternity

 

The moon is cold

She can’t shine no more

For days from now on

As she misses her love

 

The sea is wild to give a sign

On tides not in equality

Where sand is raw

And dark within denials reality

 

I will be eclipsed forever soon

As I’ve spoken my heart

I can’t go on shining

While I’m inner dying

 

The Universe is changing

And sings different notes

For what she felt within the signs

Where pure clairvoyance floats

 

And it’s no choice it’s a fact

A heart reasons dialect

The time for me has come

I will be moving on

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

I played this tonight....
XxXx

Reviews

[Kenaz]

I'm sorry for your loss, but I am glad that you have come back (at least further) out of the moonlight. Though you undoubtedly learned some truths out there in the darkness. I felt a stillness and cold come over my heart reading this. It really hit me hard when you said that you couldn't see the silver lining. Really really fantastic this one, and I am glad that we have some similarities in our music. I hope that things have gotten better from this low point!

Thank you T. for this amazing review, (didn't expect it) the better it salutes me in my early morning.... :) You're really kind, things have gone way better, through the last year.... at least, like I told you, I don't want to see myself there ;) (((HUGS)))

[joshua deathdealer]

...........Giving this one a 100 xx

Thank you dear! xx

[joshua deathdealer]

Metaphorically this is beautiful and in energy oh so sad.. I freeze slowly truly says so much..Xx

Thank you my dear, it was written out of emotion, when my grandfather died, in 2012. Thank you so much for your sweet words xo

[joshua deathdealer]

This is one of my all time favorite classical songs..You are welcome dear Elisa.

It's mine too! xx

[A. Amos]

Another beautiful poem and I loved the last line, "i will be moving on." Many of us believe we are strong but falling in love make us weak, specially if it's more kind a one sided. This poem will connect with many good write as always.

Thank you for your beautiful interpretation... my friend. Your thoughts, and effort are valued by me :)

[A. Amos]

You're always welcome my dear.

Thank you, I shall play this soon again, now sad memories came back to me... and with music, we celebrate.

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

it is to this tune a will tally a minute...beauty.

Thank you so much :)

[Frieda P]

I feel this one with every fiber of my being...I never had the chance to say good bye to my sister, nor would I have wanted to.

'I will be eclipsed forever soon
As I’ve spoken my heart
I can’t go on shining
While I’m inner dying'

You own my tears tonight lovely lady.

Let them flow freely here on Eli's place... you're embraced with my arms! X sister.... be back soon more for you forgive my absence in the meantime... :'(

[Baby Ricochet]

Bittersweet and sad. Flowed a bit like an old blues song in spots. Like in the secand and third stanza. Just beautiful...

Thank you so much.... BR, :) good to see you again, I'm slow, I know... will come back for your awesome poems... x

[Kenilo Kent]

Sometimes goodbye is a second chanbe. One of my favourite poetries soo far.. Till then live out loud.

Thank you again sweet Kenilo, have some patience with me, too many good poets on here to review, to less time... I shall visit your "moon poems" ;)

[Kenilo Kent]

Its ok, thanks. But you are always welcome. I love poetry as poetry. And keep on writing more. Be yourself and live out loud.

[Kenilo Kent]

Tc

Always dear, thank you so much! :)

[RedInk524]

Losing the warmth of another's light as it leaves the chambers of one's heart, thus leaving it to slowly freeze. Quite an interesting depiction you casted, in moonlight. But, that slow freeze can be warded off with the occurrence of another light taking place and filling the void. Question is, would you be willing to open the doors once more? Many ponder, and many return to square one on a lower note. It is almost like gambling, with your soul as the chips and happiness as the jackpot. Favoriting this.

Thank you my dear friend for this wonderful review, firstly, secondly, this was written for someone who passed away, at the 14th of November last year, a family member of me. I couldn't say goodbye to him, as I never say goodbye's though, but it's double loaded... as you can understand, it comforts, and hurts, the hurt, even more. To answer your question: "My doors are always open" I'm a Dutch, :) everyone as long they do no hurt, is welcome. I though like you huse the "gambling" part, I did spoke to someone of some failiors lately in a gambling way. :) Thank you my clever friend, for all, and favoriting this, you're a treasure. - Elisa

[RedInk524]

oops, I mistook the poem to be about love lost. Hmmm, I guess that just means that the poem is that much better since it is ambiguous. Very nice. You are a bigger treasure. :D

[RedInk524]

Sorry for your loss

No worries, you couldn't know... perceptions, and assumptions are born in self-experiences, so nothing to blame on you, I love your honesty, your way of thinking, and all here is possible, feel welcome in my world, to dare, and to talk about anything openly. Thanks a lot my friend. :)