Falling tears have a sound -
when you hear it inside
the echo and its sharpness
is deafening and shakes your core...
when you feel them from outside
its as if they'll never stop...
and when you're alone
they fall and fall and fall.
my regards to your grand father and my mistake in the interpretations, sometimes my mind is lost in somber translations, but still this poem is very affective...thank you
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
No worries Mr. Mojo, I can completely understand the mistake in the interpretations, as I always wri.. read moreNo worries Mr. Mojo, I can completely understand the mistake in the interpretations, as I always write (sometimes hard to understand) in those mazes, and gateways of my brain... :) so no worries at all, I do like personally each and every reader sees new perspectives and things out of what I wrote. So thank you deeply always, E.
Such honest prose; I've come to expect from you, but didn't think it would resonate with me as much as it did, very beautiful piece, made me think of my grandma who I used to walk home as a kid. She's got dementia and when I see her it takes a while to remember me, but something must remain of me in her mind because she always holds my hand and refuses to let go. This piece made me think of her and now I'm a bit sad, so great job for that. :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Aw, thank you so much for saying this, that is so special. I felt what you felt, in this, don't be s.. read moreAw, thank you so much for saying this, that is so special. I felt what you felt, in this, don't be sad, it's just beautiful those memories are with us :) thank you for your words Inda, they do mean a lot.
this could be a poem about a shadow, but im guessing it's another muse who left you to speak the beauty of wounded words, your declarations are always up lifting to the thought of cherubs with dough bellies laughing as you and your mate walk the roads you so longed for...great piece
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Mr. Mojo :) this one was for my grandfather (indonesian grandfather). He suffered .. read moreThank you so much Mr. Mojo :) this one was for my grandfather (indonesian grandfather). He suffered his whole life on PTSS, and love in him was blocked by the war in the days... 14 November 2012 he left our world, and then I wrote this... your thoughts are valued here, and much appreciated. Thank you.
Fall leaden from the sky and still I hear her voice.
Still I hear her cry.
Hold the tears, don't let them fall
Because inside one by one they choke us all.
I count the days till I see her face and still
I hear her cry.
Moaning in agony I feel my tears fall like ice cubes
shattering in my mind.
realmwriter
100/100
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Wow my friend, what a beautiful verse, thank you so much, for leaving your personal thoughts and fee.. read moreWow my friend, what a beautiful verse, thank you so much, for leaving your personal thoughts and feelings here. :) Thank you.
Your Welcome. I did however fail to capture what your piece is about. Though I foound the opposit in.. read moreYour Welcome. I did however fail to capture what your piece is about. Though I foound the opposit in your lines, I read the meaning in your words. In fact I sought only to honor my Daughter in the piece above. I hope it not to take away from your Grandfather...!
11 Years Ago
No worries, I like my works get interpret differently by each reader, it has always a personal touch.. read moreNo worries, I like my works get interpret differently by each reader, it has always a personal touch to those who read it. And yours was beautiful. :)
Could feel your smile in these words, as hand in hand, both souls just be. Free of all weight that life gathers unknowingly, soaring into that other, most beautiful, wonderful realm. Wonderful.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you dear, this one was a ode to my grandfather I lost recently... to help him letting us go..... read moreThank you dear, this one was a ode to my grandfather I lost recently... to help him letting us go... (x)
Nice thoughts Elisa...I like the simplicity within this poem...even though it still radiates with a powerful emotion of consideration, carring, and love...nicely written piece...
A Superb write!...Soft and gentle...I felt the serenity within your words. As I began to read this, I hear the tranquil voice of an angel soothing my heart. You have a profound way of emanating your light of inspiration through your work of art...This is truly an uplifting piece...Beautifully written!
I'm so grateful to have your rich soul around here, the only angel are you! for you inspire me alway.. read moreI'm so grateful to have your rich soul around here, the only angel are you! for you inspire me always! thank you very much so appreciated sis... makes me smile again xx
12 Years Ago
YOU inspire me... your heart is golden, Sis! This write brings tears to my eyes, because I know what.. read moreYOU inspire me... your heart is golden, Sis! This write brings tears to my eyes, because I know what a loving, sincere person you are. Thank you for sharing your heart. ~xoxo~:)
simply beautiful, dear sister! I loved the feeling of serenity & light soul, I feel like i`m in dream in another world and flying above all little things on earth...so magical, so pure..Its amazing experience to fly with u! :)
nour ~
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
So happy with you, and that I can take you with me! x
Touching write Elisa you walking hand in hand. I have been off the site for a time so missed some of your writing. Condolensces , take care and keep up your strength.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Oh dear Moon, thank you for your supportive words, and compassion. Do never worry, dear, I will go t.. read moreOh dear Moon, thank you for your supportive words, and compassion. Do never worry, dear, I will go through your beautiful older work too soon! x Take care Moon