~ A Feverish Spectrum

~ A Delirium of Fever

~ A Feverish Spectrum

 

Bright sight, 

Became fuzzy in

Loves delight

She blew out the candle

With her mind reflections

Not actually thinking

Words in her head danced

And jumped chaotic

" Shall I? and will I love you?

More than myself

What is love? "

And where did it go?

“It is still with YOU  dear”

You only lost it for a moment

The candle spoke

Out of nothing

With a white mouth

Full of dripping

Candle wax…

“Sssht… keep quiet

She whispered”

Sweaty and shaky

From cold she walked

To her bedstead

Where she disappeared

So small as a leaf

Could be in the stream

Of a moving river

Floating away with

Her thoughts and

Her eyes half open

Staring at the

White starry sky…

Resting until the

Dew was born on

Morning grass

And her cat

Woke her up...

She felt her feverish

Spectrum slowly

Went away

And nothing but a

Bad cold

Remained

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

" A vision to what bad flu can bring"



Thank you xx

Reviews

[wunder]

~"" Shall I? and will I love you?
More than myself
What is love? "
And where did it go?
“It is still with YOU dear”
You only lost it for a moment
The candle spoke
Out of nothing
With a white mouth
Full of dripping
Candle wax…"
~god - this is a lovely surreal scene!!!~
~"Resting until the
Dew was born on
Morning grass"~
~I LoVe!!!~Crazy as me!!!haha!~
~it's wonderful really!!!~

Hahaha.... we share some crazyness LOL, my goodness you found it.... such a suprise to me! :) thanks a billion my friend....

[wunder]

~lol~well you mentioned it-
so i was going to find and read~
~I do love it!~

Thankies really.... good friends, and reviewers as you can't be missed! :)

[wunder]

~never a problem...i'm always here to read fer ya'~ :)

So am I there for you! :) post more more and more LOL :D

[wunder]

~ohh-i lack the motivation tonight-lol-
i'll get around to it...sometime~lol~ :))

lol, that's ok... when "pentecost, and easter are once on the same day aight? " :D ;)) x

[wunder]

~lol~ah-just been one of those days-but
i'll try to find something newer and edit
it tomorrow...i'll throw a poem together~ :)

Don't worry, I'm in a teasing mood... :) take all the time really! but some of your fans, are just waiting... for I'm not the only one who said: Post post post hehe :D

[wunder]

~lol~no worries...i still have that ill feeling from last week-
it's pissing me off...stress i think...i'll post though-promise~ :)

I know all about that... just take the day... don't worry, laugh, live, and love... the rest will come :)

[wunder]

~yeah - i need to crash - i slept at this desk last night-blah!-
i'll pop around tomorrow & see what's happening...be good~ ;)
~*peace*~

[Androglossia]

It's amazing how a bad flu can bring wonderful thoughts to you my sweet friend. Your words are truly beautiful. my dear. From this poem, one could truly see that your mind is a prism through which beauty could be divided into its infinite spectrum. If flu can always bring such beauty into my mind then I'd rather have one:)

Hiii dear, oh thank you so much, glad you found this older piece of me too... :) I remember when I wrote it, I found the hand made note the next day, decided to share when I felt a bit better lol.... it's funny what a mind can do lol.... :D HUGS!

[Androglossia]

I agree:) That's one of the advantages of writing on paper. You're very welcome, dear!

read moreI agree:) That's one of the advantages of writing on paper. You're very welcome, dear!

[stephen dillon]

this work just got even more possesing as it went on LOVED IT!

Now that my friend is a thing, we have in common :D feeling feverish,and esp. within a sensitive mind... can give deliriums too ;-) like those pam's :D

[stephen dillon]

i can see

[Distant horizons]

Your words here have both the feeling of a warning and a memory of the balance we constantly try to achieve. All it takes to knock us off balance is a fever, but within that fever, the memory of love keeps us from falling. Fevers come and go, while love remains. beautifully creative, as always Elisa

Exactly luv, we are always on the run... and we need to balance now and then... tonight was a lovely night to construct a lot. Reorganize, (it does with the head too lol) :) So beautifully said Scotsman! :) Love to you!

[Distant horizons]

Love right back :-)

Thanks sweet friend Lorry :-)

[Distant horizons]

You're welcome sweeter friend Elisa :-)

[The Nude Writer]

I hate flu related visions. Never good for me. Great vision for you though.

Aw thanks dear... was posting on top tonight my older ones... :) so glad you read it... will be back for your beautiful stuff, as soon as it settles here a bit, around me in private chaotic live lol xoxo

*life

[The Nude Writer]

Hope things cool off soon :)

Me too thank you for your care X

[The Nude Writer]

=D no problem

[ObscurityNone]

This rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful at the end, and the ambience... Always the ambience.. I appreciate and take in on your poems, and I hope they never stop.

:) smiling hermano, posted a lot of older stuff, now on top :D so glad you enjoy them! x

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Really amazing poem! I admire the way you describe it inside so detailed, beautiful story, as if i`m reading fairytell, in the core of poem. The vision is very clear and arises trills in me, this dream seems so real, the fever is connected with insecure inner feeling of disappearing. i loved the way you describe the candle as real Someone. wonderful, sweet eli!

no♥r ~

Thank you so much love, for your support, and truly gifted words... you're such a wise element of nature xoxo

[Pax]

flu is bad and a bit annoying... you can't do much of anything because your weak... but in your eyes, you've shown what a vivid of forest of thoughts... full of love and emotional pondering of everything around you...it spoke of beauty...

A Wonderful vission....

Thank you so much Willyam, really. comming back home and read all your fantastic insights, made my early morn! xo

[Pax]

bigs smiles....I'm glad it did and your welcome... good morning to you...let's have a cup of coffee to start a day or you just rest my friend...

Oooh how I would love that.... Espresso extra strong and black please ♥

[Pax]

sure! coming up... ♥here♥ i put lots of hugs on it to put away the some nasty pain.... :)

Awwww just needed that! thanks so much! :) you're a true SAYANG! (indonesian) :P ♥

[FJ Davis]

Uniquely conceived--whichever of the different interpretations one chooses to attach to this superior piece.
Lovely of lyric, poetess, is your delirium of delights.

Thank you very much :)

[Raven Starhawk]

Utterly breathtaking in...a guess...sort of odd sort of way, not odd as in bad, but odd as in good. At first as I read I thought this was actually about illness, but then as I read it again I thought maybe there is some profound meaning that digs much deeper. ^^* Either way it was good to read.

Thank you so much for this comment, greatly appreciateted :)