~ She and her Hymn

~ In the Silent Land

~ She and her Hymn

 

 

As she walked with her baggage 

In the land of silence

Thinking, freely in heathers hue

Merged as in many continents

Different depths and temperatures

Hardened feet, frozen legs

Her thoughts of the purest vision

Became ice with freedoms voice

She hiked along the fields

With her thoughts reaching snowy

Mountains in the far away

Landscapes almost bygone

By power of changing nature

Simplicity and tranquility

Rusted in the time of the year

She shall move on, within

The inevitable

Giving up will weaken her strength

As she follows her hearts hymn

To achieve those silver streams

In seasons of mercy, by walking

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Raven Starhawk]

Sort of reminds me of a girl just trying to find her way in life or maybe trying to flee from something. I confuse myself a lot lately, but anyway this was remarkable writing. Actually it makes me think the girl is looking for peace. I am really trying to spit out what I mean but I am just rambling. ^^*

I value your heartfelt thoughts dear friend. xx

[FJ Davis]

The loveliest trip winds through these inspiring words.
Much of value perceptively portrayed, E. L.!

Thank you Frank :)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

very beautiful image, full of deep story, travelling of the soul, we all are travellers in this world,
your mind can also fly above so many countires, mountains, climates, feelings, because needs to
seek and find the truth of the existance..I love every detail in your poem, the view from high!
thank u,dearest eli!

I love to travel, and to mind travel, even when I read books, I can be totally into another world, I knowyou have that too, thank you for this beautiful comment dear :) xx

[Mr.Brik]

Thank you for the insight. I really mean it, it was an insight.

Thank you for your time, and your review. :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

To continue to walk during hardened times to get to the "silver streams" of life, is inspiring...It is such a gratifying journey. You have written a piece that encourages the reader to follow the heart, to move on and forge through that which makes us weak...A Lovely write Eli!

"She shall move on, within

The inevitable

Giving up will weaken her strength

As she follows her hearts hymn

To achieve those silver streams"

Thank you so much, for your heartfelt words :) xx

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It's my pleasure to read your beautiful words. ~xo~ :)

:) xx

[Pax]

the imagery use is a mixture of colorful words entwined together in a majestic journey of thoughts...
wow, breath-taking write indeed!!!!!!

Thanks a lot Willyam xx :)

[Eve]

one foot in front of the other , we just keep moving, moving into the future, what a magnificent write !

Thank you so much xx :)

[Eve]

love this one so much, Ellie.

[khalid]

i like the different natural images you have drawn in your poem..i like the comparison you have made amongst them..i felt i am taking a tour around the world from a landform to another, once i felt im on a mountain peak with all the ice and snow it is covered with, and suddenly down to the depth of a valley passing through dry deserts. it was a really enjoying tour..

Exactly my friend thank you so much :)

[DrD]

Elisa, what I appreciate most about your work is that you take words into strange lands where they have never been used before and you give them life and new meanings. You use them in new forms as if they had characters of their own, never discovered until now. I delight in readying your work and thank you for giving it to us.

Ooh thank you so very much kind sir, it is a strange brain I have, it can abduct me into the unconscious of richest visions sometimes, I write my heart, and after I think... Yeah, I was really in A place... I guess it has to do with overwhelmed feelers of my soul, thank u for your beautiful words DrD much appreciated!

[Constance L. Hartwell]

I continue to read your poetry because your work really speaks to me. There is no way for me to critique your writings; it is from the soul and the soul knows only love. Beautiful.

Oooh sweet soul you are, thanks a lot, your words mean so much to me, I hope soon I can read and review more of your stunning quil, I wait patiently xxx much love to u