~ Walking Higher

~ Lonely on top? Or be surrounded together?

~ Walking Higher

 

 

 

My dreamscape was inside this castle

I ran through thoughts heavenly heavy

Like running through cold water,

I couldn’t move my legs so well,

As they were stuck as burning hell

To the gravity twice times harder

I tried to move on a bit

No clear vision of where to go,

The instinctive brain, forced me

Reading my impulses, and to follow them,

Higher and higher instead, touching my

Dream, gasping for breath,

Tearing eyes, cheeks so red

Where was I lost in my home? and

Why did I ran that fast?

Twice fallen on my face

As I was fighting the space

No ending realm, to rest for a bit,

Haunting and creepy stairs

As they did not fit

They turned around, and moved

Away, like I couldn't hold to stay

I couldn’t move on anymore

Falling deeper and deeper,

With adrenaline in my chest

I did stumble on thoughts

Fall into the big black hole

I decided to stop….

Losing my mind….

Running in higher mazes

This wasn’t what I wanted

Being caged in a building

I needed fresh air, and some

Grass under my feet,

Not walking higher and higher

To fear and to run or escape

This suffocating dream, was narrowed

And yet took too long,

Rescuing myself by singing me

Out of the dream scheme, a song

I jumped onto the window in front of me

Glass pricked within my skin

There arose a crimson hue

Not knowing I just killed myself,

And woke up next to you….

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

It's October, and chilly writes, come over with Eli :) It's time for a change, as the weather change, so do we, I hope you enjoy! thank you for reading xx

Reviews

[emmajoy]

This reminds me of one of my recurring nightmares, but you're always on the move, searching, feeling, losing control, gaining it, regretting it .. a mind full of mixed emotions, screaming, fighting for escape, tearing at your mind's pictures, wanting to rip at the canvas of them .. so frightening .. and then, that ending, the realisation that there's no escape, no getting away from what turns out to be reality in a place of your own making .. and where you find who and what you find. Your words really drew this reader deeper and deeper, and, somehow, you found my fears. Eli.

Thank you so much Emma, for your wonderful thoughts on this xx

[emmajoy]

will read it again, but found it almost too powerful .. brilliant you.

Smiling xx

[Pax]

visionary creepy for early Halloween treat...but still i find it really beautiful write.

Thank you my dear friend, however we don't celebrate or have any halloween here, (it's really American) I think that's pity, we have normal carnaval, and then you can also be dressed scary, but not so much like that feeling....this write was more even a write to analize dreams, from different calibers, not even those of myself, but dreams in general, who can be very haunting... thank you!

[Pax]

oh...yeah..i remember...they have this carnival celebration...dreams are to vivid to understand at times...that they can be very scary and haunting...you have touch an inner dreams...

It is so interesting how each dream have or could have different meanings.... ohh nice you remember that! :)

[Pax]

yes DREAMS has profound meaning...but in science that i've read dreams is just a way of the brain that erase the past memories...not sure if its true...i've just read it somewhere...lol...
yes i remember...my niece and nephew likes putting on costume when that time comes... though i only seen them in photos...

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Another poem from the dark side with a semi surprise of an ending.. loved it EL
I read it quickly as it seemed to move that way , very skin prickling ! :)

Chloe

Thank you very much Chloe glad you loved it xx

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

Sure thing .. always love your writing and am behind in it and everyones-
Hope to catch up soon.

So am I with yours, you're a great example for me dear. Thank you so much, talk soon :)

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

What a very nice comment , girl you write circles around me, still I am happy you enjoy reading my thoughts. :)

[Muse]

good grief girl..a pretty pic with scary song...I was a little taken off guard. But then I read your tragedy. The stair case of life...it often looks so pretty...twisting up to the heavens. But the steps we take are often a little off beat. Tripping our way to the top. But sometimes...the journey is too much. We look for any exit to shorten our fall. Waking up to both a nightmare and a strange sense of relief. Brilliant!

Yes dreams or made up ones can have some huge contracts, juxtapositions etc thank you xo

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Never give up, never surrender... that was an interesting ending... to me it says that sometimes we must sacrifice certain things to get what we need.

Lol I like that interpretation Dalewonderfulmale! I guess, it all makes puzzle everyone here... love it. I'm styding a lot of dreams, and all meanings of it, you have a clear insight, it went through my thoughts too... xx

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I have always been fascinated by the meaning of dreams... you are very welcome Beautelisa.

Smiling! have a great weekend my dear!

[That_Girl]

Hauntingly brilliant Eli! Your rhymes are impeccable! I love this!

Thank you dear xx

[Baby Ricochet]

WOW! Gorgeous photo, beautiful poem. E.L. you made my day. Thank you so much.

Oh. Thanks a lot baby :)

[Corset]

eeeeek, this is so creepy, dark things, vampires, blood suckers, oh my... evil things give me the willys...ugh, this reads like a nightmare, one can't escape from, just in time for Halloween! awesome portrayal of the fight or flight syndrome and the waking nightmare of the vampire!

Thank you sweets, nice to give you a eery feeling with this hugs x

[Distant horizons]

Where would we be without those impulses coarsing through us. I believe those impulses are what makes us the individuals we are, and apart from everything else in life, they guided you into writing this haunting piece. Always amaze me Elisa, how you can write about being out of control so smoothly and eloquently.
Just one thing I noticed, that this has a feel of a part one about it. Part two could take this into a whole episode of events, bringing the story full circle, from end, to beginning. just a thought.

Thank you Lorry, I give it a thought :D

[Mark]

Sweet dreams are made of these... heehee... nice write girl!

Am I a girl, when I'm 30 years? lol, just wondering, thank you dear Mark. I appreciate your thoughts, and point of view, it's more a study I was writing about, :) but same way that interesting, people protect it as it has been one of my dreams, that means I did a good job :)

[Mark]

you are a girl until you are dead. :) protect? you mean project maybe? I just meant it had a dream like quality to it, I try not to assume the writer and the writing are always one ;)

Sorry, oops, you catching me on being a Dutch, yes, Project wise man.
I know dear poet... don't feel so bad, Most people on here hate me for being a honest Dutch, and speak it out what I think, straight, honest, sincere, and I love and can also have it in return when one argues with me :D Loved that respond, nice you have felt that too, hey look I'm not trying to be better than anyone here, I'm just honest. Like you're in every review, and I so like that! wished more were like that.... real food for the brain.

[Mark]

I like your dutch mind. I wish I could speak Dutch so maybe I could understand it better, but I will say this: I admire you for writing poetry in English and I like reading it. Life is far too short to hate honesty. Who would do that? Silly. You are as you should be and that is the best ANYONE can every hope for.

[Mark]

oops, not every... ever! :)

Indeed, not me. :) you're right....
So are you dear poet! keep on shining!
warm greetings from the Netherlands, and, if you're interested, mail me
You could get private lessons! :)

No worries ;) I got it :)