~ The Eye

~ A True Love Story

 

                                                                                  

 ~ The Eye

 

 

He stood in the eye, and danced

On the Iris, turning circles like

He was waiting for salvation

As the wind could bring

Velveteen wings, to his body

To carry him away,

Out from that place where he

Couldn't root as much as he adored

Yet her eye, merged with light

Of the sunbeams, mirrored

The effect between what she felt

Drowned in tears, of happiness

And his long desire to touch her

By knowing he would see her

In three days, separated from now

Where two could melt together in one

In their place of rest of the week

Was illuminating the thought and patience

Their hang out to dance by cold winters

In the snow, and laugh and jump

With La Luna of light above them

Made each warm inside,

Visions, in the next week to another

Each time anew as the years passed

Another day dreamt away, yet two to go

She danced in the eye of future,

He embraced her in their

Sparkling mirrored connection

On both retinas, blood pumping desire

To see an eye of true love

Eye in eye, face to face

As days past by all became the weekly

Love counting years of today

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Stacey Watts]

Very beautiful expression here. The eyes definitely if watched closely can tell a story. This story of love and devotion are sweet. The longing after an absence we can relate too. This story was captivating and exquisite. I love reading your words.

I'm so grateful Stacey to have your presence here, so glad you liked this one

[joshua deathdealer]

Oh my. Lol...this made me tear up at work..Such a beautiful and endearing poem..true love..my dear as only you can do. Xx

Oh thank you so much dear friend, I see you were busy at work giving me a review bomb omg.. haha.... ^^ So glad you loved this piece... means a lot to me. Thank you for reading my oldies too :) *hugs*

[Extant]

The movement of this piece is so . . . soothing. To have the ability to look someone in the eye and read their thoughts, if only everyone had someone like that to trust.

Thank you Haunt, yes, you make a good point there... your words are beautiful!

[Extant]

*Smile* You're welcome.

:) big smiles

[beautiful dreamer]

this is amazing! how marvelous! :)

Thank you very much :)

[beautiful dreamer]

welcome!

[Distant horizons]

Beautiful words Elisa, a true love story. Your words here paint a wonderful picture of the longing of the heart and mind in seperation, waiting to be together once more. Those moments inbetween, where your mind tricks you into thinking that, not only is time standing still, but must be moving in reverse, and the heart feels that missing piece.

Thank you bestie, sorry I saw a nasty little error again, so I had to edit... poetry is never dead... thank you for your wonderful review, you know me here as one of the best. hugs, and rest well my friend. Till soon dear x

[Distant horizons]

You too sweet tulip :-)
(x)

(x) To the best Scottish Green Mountain! Love and Light!

[Distant horizons]

:-)

and

(x)

[icelandicblue]

These are some of the most beautiful words that I have read:

He stood in the eye, and danced
On the Iris, turning circles like
He was waiting for salvation

The whole poem is simply gorgeous but that image is imprinted on my retina. What a fabulous fabulous poem.

I'm so grateful to you, (reorganizing my library), came again across this one... thank you so much.... your words mean a lot to me!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

when separated days seem like centuries...i feel this poem because i am in a long distance relationship...every night phone calls have to suffice between real physical meetings...

and when the time comes close...we are jumping out of our shoes...

wonderful words....a couple spots.."didn't rooted as much as he adored" that line with the one before it is a little awkward.

and another spot...did you mean "where two could melt together"

all in all...this is a lovely love poem...we can feel the longing.

Thanks for the help dear friend, yes, you're right... I go fix it :D I can understand you so well in a long time relationship :) I had waited 7 years for my man, and now other 6 together ;) There will be one day you both will be!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

some day.

thanks. Elisa.

I hope I fixed it now well :) I will send you my prayers... you're welcome!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, much smoother now...and thanks again.

we make it work as it has to be now..and that is a good thing.

That's the spirit, the way you do it like that, says enough of the person you are. (A very good one). Patience will always be rewarded ;) thank you too for all.

[ScorpioSun]

oo very lyrical, flows like music :)

Thank you very much for your time and review :)

[Larrycall]

really pretty

Thank you, so much

[Pax]

the lovely eyes make this poem very much a mystical feel...what a lovely tale my friend..enjoyed very much!!!!

Thank you a lot W. I'm not home but near Eindhoven today so will read you when I'm back :)

[Pax]

wow..that's near to my sister's place...have a safe trip..