~ We Walked Together

A Poem about Life, Death, True love, and friendship, in good and bad.

~ We Walked Together

 

My heart beats, and speaks

Like your breath does with great

Inhales next to me when we walk together

The sound of your calm is exhilarating

 

I couldn’t ride on your back,

By feeling your weakness even as your pride

And wanted to help you by illuminate

The weight of love, in footsteps of peace

 

I feel the weak of your heart,

And these blinking eyes 

You watch me with

Make me intensely sad after

I shared a long journey with you

 

Now you're going to leave me my love,

By our silver stream, filled with grass 

Where we used to see spring coming

In all her pomp to flourish

 

For long were you my loyal mate,

I hear you breathe softer, slower

When you lie though, and death

Creeps into your eyes

 

You intelligent look, turns around in fear,

Then at rest, where your heart

And breath softly stops

My head rests on your chest,

My tears roll on your white coat

To merge with a peaceful death

 

We walked together, 

And as we breathed, and lived

We died on the same day,

Lived and died on the same day…

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you for your time, and review xx

Reviews

[Cynthia Man]

I like it a lot, it's really sad, but yet full of beautiful... I never really go through a loss of pets before... But I can feel the pain, and I think this feeling can be used on friendships as well.. EVen though friends maybe not by our side, or even not here anymore, friends will always be connected... This poem makes my eyes wet... So touching....

Thank you so much CM for your words :)

[Cynthia Man]

you're welcome :D

:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I like the thoughts and the journey. Good to walk with another. Become a lonely road when we must learn to walk alone again.
"Make me intensely sad after
I shared a long journey with you"
Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Thank you very much kind sir. :)

[lee von cleef]

Me and a horse, the givers, I have shaved away to this.It is my duty to have the horse physically and mentally ready for the effort he or she is going to put out. So simple ,so much responsibility ,To feel the crowd and horse give respond to each other is like reading your poetry, a scary weighty responsibility ,thank you for being there for your horse.

I find it very nice to read that my writing brings so many different thoughts in people fueling. While it is "not" sure, "I" am that person, with an horse, nor even a horserider... interesting... :) thank you

[lee von cleef]

Perspective, I stand on the horses back to see across a flat plain,your post card ,thank you for being their for your poem to let it paint a beautiful death through you.

Glad you enjoyed it Lee, and thank you. Death is a beautiful thing, if you can accept it, or live with it next to you

[lee von cleef]

Drive past my daughter every day,"Soul"

She knows you're with her... I am sure... thank you again.

[lee von cleef]

Just read "Crumbs" by Patrick Donovan, wow, so so smooth.

[Emma Ruth]

Love the recurrent references to breath and breathing - very peaceful and moving :)

Thank you :) x

[Blue Ivory]

This is so touching! The topic is sort of original. No one really writes about one's love for one's horse. So it was refreshing to read your poem. And you wrote it with a lot of depth and emotion showing the strong connection between you and the horse. I've never had a horse, but pets, yes so I can relate. This is amazing!

Thank you so much for your wonderful words dear x

[Distant horizons]

Just beautiful, stunning, wonderful and amazing. Captured so perfectly I could almost hear the breathing.

Thank you Lorry :)

[Distant horizons]

:-)

[Sami Khalil]

Now you're going to leave me my love
by our silver stream, filled with grass...
This sums up all the feelings we go go through in life and love and fields...
The weight of love , in footsteps of peace... Love is hard but we can take those footsteps that will bring us peace of heart...
A musing on the back of a horse , thinking about her lover whom she shared life's journey but both died on the same day... Wow
This means unity in life and unity in death... A perfect love...
Thank you for sharing dear poetess.

Thank you my friend, for this wonderful review, I didn't vote negative here, want you to know that. It's about the love you can feel for animals, and how rich your bound can be with them. As we all have a soul. But not everyone sees it... Thank you Mr. Sami, for your heartfelt words.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome... I knew from the pic you are talking about a horse and animals but when I saw your comments under the Title I realized you are also talking about life and love in general ... You know poetry you can interpret so many ways ... Good job as always dear E.L.

[Kenaz]

Watery eyes after reading this poem.





line 27 "to merge with a peaceful death" an>a. ;)

Thank you Kenaz, :)

[Tree]

There is a sad beauty in this poem. Heavy in memory and sorrow. I liked this poem, that last line was stirring.

Thank you Diego :)

[Art Sun]

very nice...there is a certain emotion between those who are so closely knit, those who die and those who continue living are attached forever, a very nice write Elisa...

Many thank yous Art. :)