~ The Reversible (Part 4.)

~ Poetic story about some of my far away past, mixed up with mytology, and fantasy (Part 4.)

~ The Reversible (Part 4.)

 

 

 

 

 

The days passed, and Julien lived in his dark cave

It was barely visible, whether it was day or night,

But on the water you could feel somewhat always

The storm ashore, brought now and then deeper

Waves to the bottom, and the flow now and then

Was very strong, but he accepted his fate of the sea

 

The beautiful Nienna, in her shipwreck was weaker

For the purposes of her next rebirth,

Her belly was getting rounder and bigger,

As if her pregnancy now slowly took effort

She came now and then to keep Julien company

And swam over to him in his cave.

 

Large swarm of sand sharks swam occasionally

Beyond, and hordes of plaice, as he felt their fins

Like small feathers along his body were sliding

And realized is that the sea was everyone’s property

Beautiful simplicity and eternal peace where he

Felt charmed, and somehow had surrendered himself to.

 

The weeks passed and passed, while Julien slept

Then he suddenly awakened by a loud scream

It were Nienna and her maidens, from across

A large shark was lost in the North Sea

His coordination and route so confused, and near the wreck

Three of the maidens were injured, one was dead...

 

Nienna lay unconscious on the floor of the

Abandoned ship, and seemed not to breathe.

Her gills were weaker, and they developed

Lung capacity,  Julien did not doubt, grabbed her onto

His shoulder, and swam with her to the surface

Of the sea, and further to shore, where he found the rocks,

 

He took her to a safe place, and watched her day by day

To see changes to her lifeless body, and her growing belly

Until one morning he had collected some algae underwater

And her eyes did open, and she looked around to him with a dazed look

"Nienna, Nienna; are you there? Can you hear me beautiful princess”?

He smiled sincerely and was very glad she did survived

 

He felt that he could not long remain above the water,

And every now and then came he back to his beloved anyway,

A wink of luck to bring, and listen to her lyre plays

Nienna was like no other musical notes she played

And as she used to play in the cabin already she again

Enchanted Julien, with her magical powers...

 

One day Nienna  played so beautiful that her Julien

Could hear her leagues under the seabed, it was divine

This time it were different melodies, it sounded instinctive

He knew she would give birth to her nearly unborn

Yet this was no melody of revelry, but clean like a river

Previously emergency,  and pure love that lurked…

 

 

~ To be continued

 

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Based on true facts, and my mixed fantasy.
(The Dunkirkers are one of my ancetors)

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Horizon K.]

So lovely how he saves her and then watched over her as she seems dead, yet enchanted as the child in her belly still grows, alive. I can feel their love growing, his for her especially and even hers for him though she is asleep in this chapter. And in the opening paragraph, I can feel, all of the sea ebbing, connected. As if to have even a finger in it, I would be able to feel its every movement across the world, as Julien does. I love that your story put that into my head. One question I have is how human versus nymph they are as he places her above the sea but remains living below....
A few grammar things, i will message you dear.
xoxo horizon

Thank you dear sister, this means the world to me!!! I need constructive ctitisism. So glad you give me........... mail me. yes, I am glad you felt this chapter as Julien and Nienna are thankful to you ;) x

[Sugar Plum ♥]

i love this painting of Preraphaelites, which is great combination with the amazing story-poem...I feel the love comes to save everyone in it, and comes as pure as only gift from God.
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31.03.13

Great you do.. thank you so very much for reading them all, so glad you're back.... :)

[TheSweet]

A longer progress to the story and it gave the characters development. It's amazing how so full of life this story is given in verse as oppose to prose. I can see and understand the links to my story now and why that might have inspired you. And well, so far the feeling is mutual that you've made me appreciate my own story more... though I have no intention of adding to it. :P

So interesting, we had some same storylines... but yet different :) it's a pleasure to see you by :) thank you so much for your honesty, and beautiful reviews. :)

[Tree]

You have created a world of wonder. Dreamy. Brilliant.

Thank you very much dear poet Diego. Your thoughts, mean a lot.

[Baby Ricochet]

I love that painting. It's Waterhouse. It's been my screen saver like 5 times

[Baby Ricochet]

I love the music too but it hurts me

Yes, it is.... sharp eye dear baby! :)

I can imagine that... I am a real emotion "Facer" in good and bad....

[*** Hey Jude***]

What wonder you have woven together with fact, and fantasy! I am entranced within the beauty of this chef-d'œuvre. A delightful journey! I will catch up on the chapters as soon as possible my friend! ~ :-)!

Thank you so much.... Smiling

[*** Hey Jude***]

J'ai le plaisir...Smiling.

Smiling too dear poet :D

[Kenneth The Poet]

Brilliance...sheer brilliance.

So glad you like them all

[MOON]

I love how you have taken fact and weaved such a mystical tale of hope and promise and as usual the music stunning. Lovely

Thank you very much sweet Moon, for reading chapter/part 4.
Glad you like it! :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is mesmerizing! I am intrigued by the mystical characters that you have written...they are enchanting and have an aura that exudes an elegance. This is a Beautiful story, one that has me enwrapped! I love this, and will be waiting...

Thank you so much dearest, I'm so glad you enjoyed it till so far :)
Your words mean the world to me - xoxo

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful post! My goodness, what a tale, what drama, and, how beautifully created! Really, Elisa, this is a work of art.. clever. You've obviously thought a great deal and worked hard at this post .. so much included. Plus, the music and picture is perfect too, by the way.

For some reason it reminds me of an ancient Norse myth tho of course most countries, including your own, have the same. Wonderful!

Thanks love, the other 3 chapters are posted below.... It's a part of my history :) so glad you like it xx

[emmajoy]

Have just finished reading them all.. in the wrong order but didnt spoil them one bit .. so lovely, such a wonderful mythical tale. Thank you so much for writing it all. To bed now to dream of Julien and the Green Nymph perhaps. Nite. x

And? Did Julien enter your dreams? :) have a lovely day sweets I'm off and on bit busy... X

[emmajoy]

A beautiful man coooeeed so I coo-d back! xx

Mmmm :)