~ The Revival (Part 3.)

~ The Déjà vu with Julien ~ Poetic story about some of my far away past, mixed up with mytology, and fantasy

 

~ The Revival (Part 3.)

 

 

 

Julien wondered where he was...

In the scintillation of all these maidens

Who were staring at him

He had no clue, he was confused

As he lost his memory, and all became blank.

 

Still there was one he touched

His hand went through her long gray hair

As he had a sparkle of love in his eyes

Nienna watched him with no hurt but only grace

“Hello Julien” she whispered...

 

Now you’re one of us, the first male Nymph

We gave you immortality till the never ending

Nothingness will spread your eternity

Within our beloved seabed

“We have waited for you”

 

Their voices rang like an underwater choir

And echoed along a several times

Nienna’s powers and health became

Weaker and weaker as she swum

Back to her shipwreck to rest

 

Julien realized that he no longer

Could return to civilization

As he heard cannon battles above him

Reaching down below to the cold deep waves

While above him the battle continued

 

He accepted his fate, and Realized

That he could not do much more

Then, to adapt in the world of

The wonderful beauty

Were he was placed

 

 

 

~ To be continued

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you very much for reading,

Based on true facts, and my mixed fantasy.
(The Dunkirkers are one of my ancetors)

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Horizon K.]

Oh this is so curious and so dreamy. In the last chapter I thought Julien had forced himself upon some woman, but here these Nymphs have chosen him, forgiven him it seems, and I wonder so much about what he has inside to make him the special one, and this special relationship with Nienna... who I think has given up much of her own power and immortality to bring him into her world. There is love there, a mysterious love and I will read on!

The sentence:
"And echoed along a several times"
could be edited. maybe remove the "a", or perhaps simply "echoed several times", but off of something like the ocean floor...

Julien learned from his past sis, he was a rough seaman, but now he, is karmatised (is that a word?) lol.... :) you know what i mean i guess hihi...
Thank you so much dear sis, for noticing me on that, I will edit..... x you're the best!!!

[Horizon K.]

karmatised .. a word? I have no idea, but I know exactly what you mean! Love that idea sis!

hehe thank you so much, I just made that word........ now I will never forget I did, you're such a lovely soul, tomorrow I will read the next chapter of you, oooh can't wait! so curious! xo

[Sugar Plum ♥]

wonderful and lovely poetic fairy tell...I love the sound of waves and the place where Julien goes, full of nymphs and immortal creatures...I also wished to 'adapt" to this beautiful world :) sounds far away from the war and chaos...
{nia}
31.03.13

Great these words did make you go there lovely... thank you for your great eye! x

[Tree]

It is good that I am not reading this out of order, it's very clear to me. Your storytelling here is pure and good. Julien it seems, has a destiny to fulfill. –––Redemption?

Smiling Diego.... you will find out, loved your review, thank you so much!

[Alicia Beavis]

Great story telling in this 'series' of yours. I quite like the image at the beginning, too! Very nice!

Thank you so much dear one very happy you liked it x

[emmajoy]

Beautifully, smoothly and clearly created .. this has a magic touch as if time has stood still somehow. Julien really has something special about him, as if he's on a special journey and not of his real life. Will need to read all of this work .. its very enticing.

Thank you so much lovely one. I started with chapter 1, not knowing I became so far yet... my quill is moving... and there is more to come :D thank you deeply

[Corset]

oh! I think I am reading these out of order, but even as is they are captivating and so much fun, I love all things to do with water and love, i love that he is still in love with his nymph even though her hair is white now!

Hihihi yeah, he is... he's an modern man, seeing through pure beauty, in this story. He has eyes for a caracter, and not falls for other. :) so lovely you catched that detail dear one. LOL :)

[Corset]

:0 ah , true love has no age (heheee, man I am getting mushy in my later days)

Hehe, who says he's old? lol... maybe it's an 27er lol.... the Green Nymph is old, she was from 1639. And lived till these days beneath the seabed. Gray hair... young spirit and face, immortal... till a several level... :D but indeed, if we are speaking about real true love, age isn't a difficulty. It never was, though :D

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Captivating!!!... I'm digging in and getting settled in this beautiful story... so enwrapped in your words Eli! This tale is mesmerizing, I will definitely stay tuned!... waiting in anticipation!

Thank you so much for reading me, I really am glad that you like the tree chapters for now, thanks sissy :) it's always a pleasure to have you around xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

:) I loved it!...and can't wait for the continuation...

[Kenneth The Poet]

Keep it coming, I am hooked!

Thans working on it ;)

[Pax]

poetic epic tale. Very intriguing start towards the end. Brilliant story my friend.

Thank you very much x