~ The Green Nymph of the North Sea (Part 1.)

~ Poetic story about some of my far away past, mixed up with mytology, and fantasy

~ The Green Nymph of the North Sea

 

Shimmer in this deep dark waves

Made her hazy vision clear

If small pearly reflections

Turned her way, like tiny suns

Could shine on dark gray days

 

There was no other light

Just as the light in her self

Which kept her moving

She lived for more than four hundred

Centuries long deep under the Sea 

 

Still there was never one shipper

Or sailor who had found her

Her fate was written in her being

Like others wished her bad, but

As strong as she was, she always smiled

 

Some days she saw other mortals die

As she wondered when it was her time

She knew she was special cursed

Her long hair was in the meantime gray,

But still she had a beautiful young face

And eyes so sharp, she wasn’t blind

 

In the days were she was still mortal

She was an beautiful princess taken by

The Dunkirkers who raped her, and

Where her pregnant healthy body after

They poisoned her and her unborn child

 

Was dumped in the mystical North Sea

But she is still awake in the dark and forgotten

Seabed, where she waits, until the moment

Presents itself, and were she and others victims

Shall dance among the revengeful souls and

Whispering their immortality in their lungs

 

 

So she and her unborn child will be reborn

 

To be continued...

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Based on true facts, and my mixed fantasy.
(The Dunkirkers are one of my ancetors)

Thank you xx

Reviews

[Horizon K.]

Dreamy and melancholy... Yet this beautiful nymph who's life was spoilt by evil deeds maintains a smile as she waits patiently for her destiny to unfold.

It's very exciting to see you writing
Stories Elisa... And I noticed below that this one will continue. I await the continuation of your tale and very curious if you will continue in this lovely poetic style and this nymphs fate...

xx Horizon

Thank you so much sister, for your support, and time... (lately I was so busy) but I have a little bit more time, so I could finally edit them, and put the 6 poetic stories back in here... :) (if I can improve something or if you see errors, please say so...) Your help is fantastic, and I'm so pleased you liked it, it will continue, they are all in logical order on my page now, I will be back for your book too.. promise! already have read much of you... Thank you sister xx

[Horizon K.]

I will look for the other chapters:)
As far as mistakes ... Are you going for perfect grammar? You do use were twice, when I think you mean when or where... A few other things I can recommend, but easier when I am at home tonight...
xx

Yes, thanks for that one sis.... It's my typical Eli error, lol, I guess everyone would recognize me by those... I will look it up, great you notice me once again, sometimes I'm so blind for those.... Yes please mail me!! love and thankies xxx

[icelandicblue]

A sad tale with many good and bad elements of human behavior. I love that her light is one from inside her; her own light guides her despite her tragedies. And there is hope...always hope.

Thank you sweet woman for reading Part 1. :) so appreciated... I'm working on Part. 7... :) in between, and after long weekends I will be back, for your art! can't wait!!!

[Sugar Plum ♥]

amazing dark story, melancholic, but so poetic and vivid picture of nymph...I loved the hope and the sun in the end, as she is waiting to be reborn, she is waiting for her victory in the end...and until then she will be so free roaming in this cold north sea...
sad and true, created with beautiful outlines-verses, dear Eli!

I'm so grateful to you dear friend, many thank yous for giving them all a time and chance!!! love to you x

[Androglossia]

An interesting story of hatred and vengeance which the character carries even into immortality. This is going to be an exciting read for sure because of its poetic form and I look forward to reading more of it. I admire your boundless creativity my dear:)

Thank you my dear for reading part 1. They are still under reconstruction, but the lack of time... :( missing you, hope to talk soon after easter! Happy Easter dear... :) xx always in my mind you are.

[Androglossia]

OOhhh, I miss you too dearly:) But take your time and enjoy your Easter with your beloved O_o

And you're very welcome xoxox

[Julia Mancini]

This is very beautiful :-) Thank you for writing this

Thank you sweety! :) can't wait to have more spare time for your art...

[@zeewhykay]

Where to start...
The music took me by surprise ! I was about to shut it off, then I realized, HEY, if this is how you want me to experience this piece, then so be it. I absolutely adore this. ( Music and writing )
It flows through like a gentle creek, lower and lower, hair in the wind with a gentle breeze. The imagery was powerful for me, and that first line ''deep dark waves''. God I love alliteration, it is so refreshing.
I will definitely be looking for more, thank you for this.
Cheers.

Thank you so very much for this nice review.... So appreciated!!

[Ken Simm.]

A tale of enchantment with all the right elements. It is true to all the traditions and yet we the readers can see the element of truth and history that underlies all these tragic tales.
You have a skill for these kind of tales and the ethereal quality you give this one flows with the ebb of the sea.

I feel really blessed with your words Ken, my thank is great to you. Thank you for reading Part 1. *smile* - Elisa

[Jack...]

So enchanting a tale you have woven here Dear Elisa. I felt as if I were afloat upon an endless sea watching, waiting, praying for her soul and her time, when once again she will dance. I look forward to the continuation of this fine poetic tale.

Thank you so much Jack for reading Part 1. all is on my page right now (it was under recontruction)... if you still catch some errors, please note me ;) thank you for your time, and review, truly appreciated. - Elisa

[TheSweet]

Finally getting round to reading them. I must say I enjoyed this one, both mystical and real. Dark and poetic. I do love this style :) Reading on...

Thank you so much, I missed this one back in the days my friend....

[Tree]

A haunting, tale. I love the imagery so far and am wondering what is to come. I will re-read this
once more before moving on, but am Hooked.

Thank you so much dear friend, smiling...

[Tree]

Ok. During my second reading I picked up a few more things, like this feels epic in a way, the storytelling. Almost like the narration at the beginning of a movie. The murky sadness deep under the sea; deep, inside the heart..... E.L the only thing I might recommend to you is in the the second stanza, last line, you should consider removing the word "level." I think you don't need it. Also the music is perfect, with your tone... Looking forward to the next chapter,

Diego.

Thank you so much Diego, for entering truly into this.
It means a lot. You have no lack... you have a clear mind, who
Sees it. Thanks again, I will pick that up. Greetings from the North Sea.