~ Surrexit

~ A poetic story about Trishna

~ Surrexit

 

In the thirsty streams

Where all the hot

Summer sun was gone

And the reeds of the earth

Were admonished to straw

 

Her hand  grabbed the last

Mud from the water down

There was no clue of being

It was half past dusk

The air was clammy

 

Dry sand filled with craquelé cracks

She felt under her fingernails

It scraped and pecked

She was back on earth

But not more in prosperous states

 

Risen from the dead

In a whirlpool of destruction

Without any need

Or expectation no helping

Hand or any empathy

 

She was nothing but void,

Dead and soulless

In these empty summers

Full of "Trishna" she had to

Crawl until her bones turned to dust

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

This was just some dark art... hope you sleep well ;)
Thank you xx

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Scary!...(I'm reading this in the wee hours of the night)
Wow Eli, didn't know this side of your art...very refreshing in a haunting way! I love it!...we all have different sides to us that should pour into our work of art once in awhile. This is captivating! Great write, Sis.

Thank you sis, honestly and normally not my type and genre to write about, but some changes now and then are good I think :) glad you picked that up ;) love to you sis x

[joshua deathdealer]

Claps* There is so much I could say about this poem. F@^ckin brilliant is the first thought. I can't wait to get home and catch this one in all its glory. ^^

Hah! thank you so much sweetest friend. I am so glad you loved this one.... ;) ;)

[beautiful dreamer]

oh wow i probably WONT sleep! i can't go through the house in the dark already as it is! gave me shivers great poem elisa!

Ooops ;) sorry hihi, thank you dear x

[beautiful dreamer]

you are welcome no big deal i'll just bring Buddy around the house with me wherever i go. lol but the dogs a wimp too!

Hahahaha....

[beautiful dreamer]

no good! lol :P

[Ken Simm.]

You show a darker side here Elisa and show you are in command of many forms equally well. The protagonist here would empathise with Fushia from the Gormenghast stories by Mervyn Peake.

Ah Ken, great review, thank you so much...

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

absolutely wicked! Well done Sis!

It was a bit huh, not what they expect from out of my fluffyness....thanks sis xx

[Jack...]

As if shadowed fingers unexpectedly touch me in the darkness, the sweat falls from my brow, my breath becomes tethered so, Something supernatural in a hauntingly serene way wraps me of fear and casts my sight beyond the cloud covered moon. As I gasped I clawed for the earth, reaching whatever I might find and there before me stood beauty in the form of words...I read...I felt...I closed my eyes and dreamed. Very nice, Elisa.

Great my friend, this was the near dead experience quite a bit ;) an older one of me, edited... thank you so much for your poetic ray of words, they give me goosebumps.... my friend, you are treasured! :) Elisa

[J. J. Nightingale]

Of course I don't know of "Trishna"

But I know this is a very good write ..

It has a morbid feel of desperation and unquenchable thirst ..

It is delicate .. and reaches far beyond what we as mortals can understand ..

Wow ... Good One Luv ... Jazz xo

Don't worry love, "Trishna" is a name, it means Thirst, Desire..... (Indian).
But it's also a movie... it can get confused googling it...
You're close, love... you always feel my soul.... my writes, thank you so much!
Love you xxxx

[J. J. Nightingale]

Always little Dove .. xxoo

Much love from the cold Netherlands my sweet woman! xoxo

[J. J. Nightingale]

Be warm, and smile from sun to sun .. :)

Yes, always... :) xoxoxo thank you dear!

[Inda]

This is some dark stuff; a nice change that surprised me, great write, gets under your skin. Reminds me of a mix of Poe and King. Love it!

Nice you mention those :) yes, not my normally style, but we all have the dark pen somewhere hidden, and when it comes out, it screams ;) thank you dear Inda... always, E.

[emmajoy]

Variety is the spice of your life and here you prove it with a genre i didn't know you wrote... there's a mythical touch to this, a dredging from the past that walks in the shadows of the mind. Fine stuff.

Ah my dearest friend, and love, you always understand me!!! thank you so much... indeed Eli is nothing without variety, you know me best!!! ;)

[emmajoy]

Could be :)

I think you're close.... :D

[emmajoy]

Of course! To my dreams or nightmares now.. take care of you. zzz

Zzzzzies for me soon too, you too ok.... sleep tight! x

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

You have an absolute knack for imagery and word choice, my friend. I am so very impressed by this piece, it was perfectly penned. I love the way that the piece flowed from start to finish. Fantastic.

Thank you so much my friend, I came up across this one again, in my huge library, I'm working on some edits... coming from you means a lot, thank you.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

It was beautiful...wow.

Thank you so much again :)

[S]

This piece has a horror effect...

It has... not my usual style to write, but I believe everyone has a dark pen somewhere... :)

[S]

its great though...

I'm grateful to you, thanks :)