New Soul

Cold
Shallow
Empty
Dead

You run through my mind
You damper me
The shallow promise I gave myself
The empty hopes for connection

No longer can I stand where we stood
No longer can I say what I said
Things have changed
I have changed
You're the same
You're what I need

I am no longer the soul you knew
I am now the soul you were warned
The soul you saw coming
The soul that you feared

I do not blame you
I do not blame myself
I blame the world

This
Cold
Shallow
Empty
Dead
World

Author's Note

This is my first poem that I have written in a long time. Please critique me on anything and everything. Thank you.

Reviews

Thank you both for the positive reviews! This is just what I needed to encourage me to continue writing poetry.
Also thank you for advice of the word choice, Yetifax, I like that much better.
Again, thank you.

[Juliet]

I like how you tied the beginning and end of the poem together with the same adjectives. :) It conveys the mood of the poem well.

The only things I saw that could have improved were probably

"I do not blame me" --- Me is a decent word choice, but would probably sound better "I do not blame myself" or something of that nature.

Overall though, good write.

[for my ♥]

The world can be cold and harsh, well expressed