midnight stalker

Darkness fell                                                   Darkness fell

I walked                            

                                   I planned

I danced about across

The street

                                   I watched and waited unseen

I pranced about

Not a care in the world 

                                   I skimmed along in her wake

                                   Hardly stirring the shadows

Moonlight shimmered                                    Moonlight shimmered

Protecting me

                                   Threatening to expose me

Skipping down the gloomy

Road 

                                   Looming in the dark 

                                   Waiting to strike

I sit

                                   I pounce

I see the shady Figure

Leaping                      Leaping

Coming                      Coming

Closer and closer                                            Closer and closer

I run

                                   I follow

 Screaming   

                                   Laughing

Terrified

                                   Amused

Closer and closer                                             Closer and closer

I trip and collapse

Shaking on the freezing road

                                                                        I pull a knife

He closes in

                                   I lunge forward

I’m petrified

Frozen with fright

Knife gleaming          Knife gleaming  

He raises it high

                                   I savagely shove it down

Stinging pain races thou my body

                                   I draw the blade

Dagger glistening      Dagger glistening

Heated blood runs     Heated blood runs

 

Cascading down          

 

Me

                                   Her

Blackness closing in

                                   Blood still gushing

Life leaving

Breath slowing

Heart stopping

Strength departing

Brain sluggish

Muddied with pain

Light headed 

Cold seeping in

Then nothing              Then nothing

                                   She’s gone

                                   Over

                                   Jobs done

                                   I Stand

                                   I disappear

                                   Never looking back

                                   Never seen again 

 

Author's Note

its a 2 voice peom so keep that in mind while reading it, otherwise it will look confusing.

Reviews

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

Really loved this poem and I've got to say my favourite the structure is really well presented and after reading your note I read this poem again to find that it has another dimension your a truly gifted writer and your work is dark and creepy in a good way keep them coming I can't get enough My only criticism would be to maybe have the second voice in bold or another colour but its your writing and present it how you choose but really well done

[Cherrie Palmer]

I like a 2 voiced poem , this was very good and propelled me through the story you unveiled the stage you set.

[northern monkey]

Gotta agree with GG and AB, I've not read anything quite like this before, so cudos for courage,and you write powerfully. Clever idea. Enjoy your work.

[johntheghost]

wow, i wrote a poem titled drakness falls but it seems relatively light in comparision.
I like the counterpoint.
Good job.

[Dilan Gray]

I don't think I have ever seen a poem like this, I really enjoyed it. It is really unique and I loved the two points of view. I loved it!