Leaving Home

The sunlight warm had cast a charm ,
on my mind today
I could hear aloud and clear ,
please don't go away .

 

I looked around but none I found ,
save the oldest garden tree ,
it seemed somehow every outstretched bough ,
was waving back at me.

 

It pained my heart but I had to start ,
I opened the gate to go ,
every step I took I turned to look ,
my pace so very slow .

 

As I waved goodbye I heard a sigh ,
as wind blew through the grass
A helpless voice ,"I have no choice ,
you may pass you may pass".

 

Reviews

[Deviant Works]

Utterly enchanting and beautiful... I am struck speechless by the emotions in this poem. My eyes filled with tears as I came to the very end, which I must say was closed absolutely superbly. In truth, I was just blown away by the last two lines, without a doubt they left a gut-wrenching impact. There is no place like home. Nowhere better to be but in the one place that holds many of your fondest of memories. I love this piece, Abhijit. Amazingly written.

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

WOW!! breathtaking write i'm so glad you asked me to read this it is such a heart warming poem your storytelling ability is faultless this poem is somewhat heartbreaking at the same time as producing a smile i'm smiling because of such a great write but the tree is waving goodbye and I don't want to leave

thank you so much for sharing

100/100 I wanted to give more but the max will have to suffice

[Emily B]

enchanting is exactly the right word

this is wonderful

[M.Babu]

Beautiful work here. I'm very nostalgic with this piece and it's amazing how you brought it out very well.
AMAZING! and i Thanks to Tate for directing me here.

[Ashley Myers]

i loved everything about this poem. The flow, the rythm, the words, the mental image it gave, it was perfect

[Quinn Blackburn]

gently touched with sorrow, a beautiful wordcrafting!

[freelancejouster]

your second stanzas seem to call to me, and the old garden tree was waving back... i can't tell if you're to be a child or an adult or a teen actually leaving for the first time, and i think that's BRILLANT, the ambiguity... you have real talent, sir.

[Alicia™]

Aww, this is a sad poem… Good job.

[Poetic Beauty]

The imagery in this poem is stunning and really enjoyed reading it last night when Tate sent it to me.

[Greg9119]

Love the way you portray such attached feeling with such a small amount of words.

[EmpressPoetess]

Greta writing, great flow. I remember when I had to leave home at 19, it was scary.