Leaving Home

The sunlight warm had cast a charm ,
on my mind today
I could hear aloud and clear ,
please don't go away .

 

I looked around but none I found ,
save the oldest garden tree ,
it seemed somehow every outstretched bough ,
was waving back at me.

 

It pained my heart but I had to start ,
I opened the gate to go ,
every step I took I turned to look ,
my pace so very slow .

 

As I waved goodbye I heard a sigh ,
as wind blew through the grass
A helpless voice ,"I have no choice ,
you may pass you may pass".

 

Reviews

[Deviant Works]

Utterly enchanting and beautiful... I am struck speechless by the emotions in this poem. My eyes filled with tears as I came to the very end, which I must say was closed absolutely superbly. In truth, I was just blown away by the last two lines, without a doubt they left a gut-wrenching impact. There is no place like home. Nowhere better to be but in the one place that holds many of your fondest of memories. I love this piece, Abhijit. Amazingly written.

[Dhaye]

Sir, welcome back. This is another amazing poem from you. I really admire your works. I am your fan, you know that.

An old craft but so beautiful.

This is so moving...as someone has to bid goodbye. There are times we can't control what's happening in our lives. We have to do something though it's really difficult for us.

There are many reasons of leaving home. It can be permanently or temporary only. Work/Job at the other place? Isolating yourself from your family? Finding yourself? Medication? Or the saddest thing...leaving your family because you have to live in your own way?

Any reason the speaker had, I know that it was for the best of all.

Emotional but well-penned, Sir.

[Kanchan Ojha "Eureka"]

Lovely write..:-)

[Ice QueenJen]

wonderfully written, so sorry it took so long for me to read.

[JB Murray]

Wow... this piece is fantastic on so many levels. In relation to so many subjects, be it love, or friendship, religion, or faith. This piece certainly stands out above so many others. Great job! Really solid write. Enjoyed it thoroughly, thanks for sharing!

[AlieahRose]

I FEEL LIKE...
I'VE READ THIS...
ONCE BEFORE AND...
EVEN THEN IT...
TOUCHED MY HEART...
IT'S SO GOOD...
MAYBE I JUST...
HAD DEJA VU...

[MOON]

What a beautiful poem about leaving home.

[EMMIE]

YOU HAVE MOVED ME DEEPLY I AM IN LOVE WITH THIS POEM! I DON'T KNOW WHAT ELSE TO SAY THIS IS SO PRECIOUS!!!

[Storyteller of Dimensio..]

Very beautiful. I can relate personally. But this can also nicely be applied to beginning of stereotypical heroes journey that we all know so well.
I can only point out some formating issues on this, but nothing major.

[Nirmala]

Beautifully expressed, the pain of departure. Loved this verse the most

I looked around but none I found ,
save the oldest garden tree ,
it seemed somehow every outstretched bough ,
was waving back at me

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I like this...it's hard to leave a place you love so much, but sometimes you must

Great Write