Chantilly Lace

A figure, dancing
On Chantilly lace
Bounding, prancing
Without a face

Look to the left,
Look to the right,
Something is bereft
See? It's light!

See the pretty girl
Moving about the floor?
Oh, that last twirl
Leaves you wanting more

Yes, she does that to people
With her Chantilly lace
She'll take you to the highest steeple
Where you'll find her face

Author's Note

Not sure what this was supposed to be, but the phrase "chantilly lace" has such a good rhythm to it and I wanted to get this out of my head. :) Hope it's okay...kinda creepy, to me.

Reviews

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the last verse in intricate&beautifully expressed.
very well written luv ;)

[The Morbid The Merrier]

It was very, *very* good! It had depth, allure and imagery. Well done!

[Pax Analog]

"Kinda creepy"? Why? Haunted by an old song title? ;-)

Ah, maybe you think creepy 'cause this is a bit like the old titular song bein' laced w/"Eyes Without a Face" -- a bit of goth mystery to it.

The juxtaposition of "pretty" and the girl's face being hidden is interesting.

Chana's take below is cool.

I do think there is an air of intrigue, mystery, potential danger to this deceptively simple lyric piece though.

"Yes, she does that to people
With her Chantilly lace
She'll take you to the highest steeple
Where you'll find her face"

That last part has echoes of Hitchcock's Vertigo too.

[Dark Empress]

I like it, very good write :)

[Aven]

I'm not sure either, but I love it :D

[Goodbye]

I didn't think creepy - I thought of a beautiful, somewhat distant star of a woman who only shows herself to the most worthy. That's just my take.

Very, very good write!

[ForTheWorld]

its nice, its definitely nice..i love the rhyming, actually i love everything in this poem..its an wonderful poem, a great piece of writing

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't know. I didn't find the poem creepy. It was a very good description of a pretty girl dancing allowing the people watching to feel free in mind and imagination for a moment. I like the story in the words also. A excellent poem.
Coyote

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I thought you were writing about a ghost, but no sure now..never mind, yes Chantilly lace.. is a great line, reminds me of a song..well done

[Alicia Schroeder]

Such a beautiful peice..