What Became of Overwhelming

Let our life drain and drain
until our souls pool the earth
in a magnificent flood
of luscious red.

 

And the lilies white
will float in numbers
charging their way
across the seas.

 

The heavens will open
pouring down stars
alive in passion.

 

The sun is not seen tonight.

 

Only fruity skies
and cotton clouds
to bathe the breezes of
chilled twilight.

 

There is a feeling

an emotion

here.

 

Thriving.

 

This wild thrill

we begged to live off

has lead our world

to its dying.

 

 

Author's Note

When I wrote this poem I had several ideas I was dealing with. It's the power of Love, the power of Rage and very strong forces that arise inside us creating changes in the world.

Note- The white lilly usually symbolizes the innocence of death.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

We live in a world where few things I understand anymore. We sent young men and woman to war to learn death before they have learn life. They should be dancing in the street. We sent 200,000 Soldiers as a symbol of peace. Men with gun won't create friendship or love. Only fear and hate. Old countries who need to be left alone. Turn their hate toward busy bodies countries trying to control a world. Your poem goes in many directions. I believe we will know peace when the world understand. Sent food, water and medical teams to begin the healing. I like the ending to your poem. A excellent poem. You made me think again.
Coyote

[ScaryTrees]

nice imagery and sharp metaphor
a well done piece

[Robin]

this poetry , you tell of the numbing and dumbing down of the soul and spirit of mankind , symbolic imagery of the cosmos that play across the heart , evocative writing ...

[NyanMeow]

Wow, the symbolism in this poem is really something. Simply a wonderful job.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

The depth of your writing is way beyond your years. My mind transported to a place familiar, yet until then unseen. Fantastic work! Slow agony leading to the final, fatal word. WOW!

[Frantzuu]

"Only fruity skies
and cotton clouds
to bathe the breezes of
chilled twilight."

I like this stanza a lot, great poem. :D

[micayla3]

beautiful, just amazing

[Linzey]

I love the depth in your poem. You know how to use words in ways that can blow others away and remind us of the good and the bad in life. You seem to always know how to write with a sophistication as well. Amazing job =)

[al25]

I really liked this poem. It seems like its about going through a lot of strong and different emotions at the same time. Great job :)

[kuru]

this is really beautiful, nice imagery and the feeling of overwhelming emotions captured very well