Wanna be

Just some thoughts.

I’m a wanna be cowboy.

Chugging down the line.

Working is my living

Feels like I’m doing time.

Days all run together, I need a vaca!

Stupid bee just stung me.

Way to start my day.

Wanna be cowboy.

Horse nipped my arm.

Silly beast it’s time to ride,

Working my uncles farm.

Wanna be cowboy

Into the dust bowl I ride

Come ride with me my lovely,

I need you by my side.

Wanna be cowboy

This is where I live and play

I look out from my mount

And shed a tear as I pray

In the depth of my heart

I look out and know

This will be gone one day.

Reviews

[joshua deathdealer]

Awesome write. I've had an idea of writing a cowboy poem with same direction..you pulled it off very nicely. Excellent work.

[DreyaArt]

very interesting poem, the style is interesting, i have to say it made it difficult to read that you said "vaca" that just sounds wierd, i mean i know it rhymes with "day" but, honestly in my opinion that just ruined the poem. But it was good other then that, a little rocky like you were aiming for nice flow, but couldnt quite get there, I mean, it does happen not every peom is as good as it could be.
but anyways flow often comes with practice, please continue writing. :)

[Sam Severn]

My favorite poem YET of yours, Dancing Fish! Truly MAJESTIC!! ㋡

[rae52]

great

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

This has a fantastic FUN rhythm to it. Loved it!

[Dearantlers]

This was really good, and I can kinda relate to it cause I've been on loads of cattle drives doing stuff like that, and it's my uncle's farm like it is in the poem.

[stars are far]

this is nice
and who you wanna be is great :))

[Rae]

This was an enjoyable read!!

[Audrey Howitt]

Cute and poignant! Great job!!!!

[NinjaPi]

it could a little fine tuning but i think its great.