Echo

Echo

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A not too uncommon interpretation of what ghosts may experience

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 I hold the cold metal gun within my hands. Heavy. It is heavier than I thought it would be. My heart begins to pound in my ears. I swallow hard but the lump won't go down. I hold the gun in my right hand, pushing the safe  back beneath the bed with my left. I rise to my feet with a glance at the form lying just beneath the covers. My feet guide me to the old rocking chair waiting in the corner. Click. The safety is released, just like he had shown me. One bullet in the chamber locked into the chamber now. I stare down at the weapon with a clear head and clear eyes. It is only when I look back at the lifeless form that the tears begin to fall. I lift my heavy hand with the barrel to my temple. I feel regret for a promise not yet broken. With my eyes pressed tightly I lightly squeeze the trigger.  A loud noise crashes through the silence of the room momentarily before leaving us in the dark.

I hold the cold metal gun within my hands. Heavy. It is heavier than I thought it would be.

© 2012


Author's Note

I was going for something with a lot left up for interpretation, would be interested to know if this is too vague.

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This is a chilling story, one that makes you think, and I love how you left it completely up for the reader to interpret, really makes them have to look back to test their judgements.

But the best bit for me was how you repeated the first line at the end, amazing stuff, amazing stuff!

Andrew~

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2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

12 Years Ago

Thank you for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.



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This is a chilling story, one that makes you think, and I love how you left it completely up for the reader to interpret, really makes them have to look back to test their judgements.

But the best bit for me was how you repeated the first line at the end, amazing stuff, amazing stuff!

Andrew~

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

12 Years Ago

Thank you for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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SCARY is a word you've made it mean something! 100/100 Great story!

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