Beyond Visual

about a woman who has been so badly scarred she believes she can never be loved again

 

I Am Bruised

I Am Broken

Take My Heart As A Token

You Deserve A Soul That Shines

With A Face More Beautiful Than Mine.

You Inspired me With Your Words,

I Loved Every One I Heard,

I Loved Every Kiss You Gave,

But I've Been Struck By A Tidal Wave,

I Loved You As The Years Went By,

But Now I Daren't Try.

There Are No Doctors That Could Mend Me

No Man That Could Love Me

And No Hero That Will Save Me.

Reviews

[JP thinks the WC is apt..]

It's a melancholy piece that genuinely tugs at the heart strings and which is impeccably rhymed. I do think the speaker is being a little hard on herself but her voice evokes great sympathy. That's why this piece achieves its goal so emphatically.

An effective poem.

P.S: Thanks for the review, sorry it took me so long to reply but I've been a bit preoccupied over the Bank Holiday weekend. Hope you had a good'un. James x.

[Legion]

Am I reading this right? I read some of the other reviews and they seem to be suggesting that a man hurt her emotionally, but that isn't necessarily what I am reading. I am reading it as she was physically hurt and thinks the man deserves better. Either way, it is a good write.

[THE BLACK SEAL]

this does sound like a tragedy. however buck up little camper. things will improve. very nice write though

[Gary H]

Thats a really sad tale you tell here. I was expecting some hope in the end but I guess sometimes there is none. The way you have written this seems like there is one line to come, that saving grace but this isn't there - fifteen lines when I was expecting sixteen. Well thought out and works well.

[BrightEyes]

I agree with Rain here . the tragedy of this work is the truth behind the words. So many endure such emotional and verbal abuse - a mantra begins in their soul - destroying all self-worth- making the words hold truth in their eyes. a wonderfully written piece.


laura

[Rain]

What a sad story, but is exactly what happenes when a woman, or man endure so much verbal and physical abuse over the years. It isn't rue. There are good men, who understand and can heal you, with love a patience. Great piece. Rain..