I Wonder

To you
I wonder,
If you could see me, I would call you
I would call you to see if you would hear me
If you could hear me would you listen?
If you listened would you understand without judging me?
Judging me on who I am, what I do, and how I hear you
I hear you with fear inside me
Fear that if I listened I would fail to understand
I would not understand how you could hear, 

Hear, listen and understand without judging me
Still, my heart wonders, 

Wonders if you would forgive me
Forgive me because I love you
If only you could open your eyes and see me
I wonder
Love from me

Author's Note

This is the first ever poem I wrote. I always like to honour it by keeping it in my vault, kind of a door to the vault of the mysterious poems... ha-ha I say too much I know:)

Reviews

[Jocie]

very good I felt relieved to finally here something from the heart keep writing u deserve it

[nunya]

wow this is very good...u can write amazingly...:)

[erica]

wow this is amazing...u have true talent..keep writing

[Phillitup]

It had a nice flowage pattern. Quite interesting. The poem left me asking so many wonderful questions. I like reading work that makes me think hard like this. Thanks for sharing!

[Abdur Raqeeb]

Great first attempt! The flow was really good. The doubts which linger in the mind really struck me.

[Adam Whitworth]

nice poem, thanks

[Sid]

Great write for a first attempt at poetry, the honesty and the innocence stood out for me and the thought flow is very nice too...great write!!

[J. Write]

Thank you :)

[Keith]

Nice first foray into poetry. The general feel of the piece is nice in its gentleness. However, a couple of the lines didn't work for me. But, in poetry that is OK. It's about your expressions. And if a reader connects, that is the wonderful bonus.

Thank you for sharing. :)

[J. Write]

Thank you :)

[Sacha Davison]

First ever poem? I'm impressed. Far greater than my earliest works :P

[J. Write]

Thank you :)

[Riley Mistwood]

awesome poem

[J. Write]

Thank you :)