I Wonder

To you
I wonder,
If you could see me, I would call you
I would call you to see if you would hear me
If you could hear me would you listen?
If you listened would you understand without judging me?
Judging me on who I am, what I do, and how I hear you
I hear you with fear inside me
Fear that if I listened I would fail to understand
I would not understand how you could hear, 

Hear, listen and understand without judging me
Still, my heart wonders, 

Wonders if you would forgive me
Forgive me because I love you
If only you could open your eyes and see me
I wonder
Love from me

Author's Note

This is the first ever poem I wrote. I always like to honour it by keeping it in my vault, kind of a door to the vault of the mysterious poems... ha-ha I say too much I know:)

Reviews

[Kurera]

awesome :P keep practicing

[J. Write]

Thanks :)

[InsanityWriter]

Nice job. :)

[J. Write]

Thank you :)

[DrD]

I cannot remember finding a work with better construction than this. I applaud this work for its theme, clever formation and absolute enjoyment to read.

[J. Write]

Thank you for your kind comments.

[Gray Witch]

I love first postings! They tend to say so much about the author....I always go to the last page to read the first ...

[Persona]

I like the continuation onto the next line from the previous one. I'm wondering - are you writing the poem to yourself?

[Writer *78*]

We all have that door as writers so I know what your talking about when it comes to that. This is very well written to be your first poem from years back. You should be proud to have the courage to put it up on here. Well done.

-Writer *78*

[Art Lover/Love Writing]

very heartfelt

[Felicity's Eve]

Heartfelt and very lovely.

Awesome write! :)

[ms. barrie]

this is an amazing poem for considering it to be your first, very romantic, indeed. thanks for sharing

[Felecia]

Awesome poem for the first one that you've ever wrote. I enjoyed reading it. it was lovely, and romanctic. Amazing