I Wonder

To you
I wonder,
If you could see me, I would call you
I would call you to see if you would hear me
If you could hear me would you listen?
If you listened would you understand without judging me?
Judging me on who I am, what I do, and how I hear you
I hear you with fear inside me
Fear that if I listened I would fail to understand
I would not understand how you could hear, 

Hear, listen and understand without judging me
Still, my heart wonders, 

Wonders if you would forgive me
Forgive me because I love you
If only you could open your eyes and see me
I wonder
Love from me

Author's Note

This is the first ever poem I wrote. I always like to honour it by keeping it in my vault, kind of a door to the vault of the mysterious poems... ha-ha I say too much I know:)

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, this is your first poem ever? It's really good. I love the idea of it. I think it's good when you find a person that won't ever judge you for anything. When you find someone that accepts you for who you are, they're definitely the right person. Relationships are tricky, but worth the experience for fellow writers and authors. Love is what gives writers the most inspiration. The many pondering questions, heart ache, and unforgettable memories to share. I wish my first poem that I ever wrote was this amazing and special. Keep writing and posting!! :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG ;)

[Leigh]

Great ending

[Castonovia]

Beautifully penned with such sadness in every delicate, lovely word especially for a first ever poem... awesome :)

[deepblue04]

This is really sweet. good job!

[Amber Tasch]

excluding the line "If you could see me, I would call you" Which makes little sense to me, this is a very sweet and rythmic poem. It has a sort of sad-sweetness to it and i absolutely love it!

[Ana Soo]

I couldn't find anything wrong no matter how I looked for it. Exquisitely written.

[Dark Butterfly]

rerally good for a first ever!

[de_maruf]

fine

[Jon Roggie]

Now you have shown some of your roots. Like the beginnings.

[Ravyne Hawke]

For a first poem, this one isn't half bad. It definitely tells the story of a relationship that has graduated from the "honeymoon" stage. Lots of questions, the pondering what ifs. I wish sometimes I still had the first poem I ever wrote, but my 5th grade English teacher probably burned it for being too dark and gory lol. Great work here on this piece.