You Beat Me

“Let’s play a game,” you said
“What game?” I asked
“Whoever cries first, loses”
“No,” I shook my head
“Come on, one last dance”
I smiled and gave in
You took my hand, and led me to the dance floor
Reluctantly, I followed
Suddenly, we were swinging from side to side
Swinging to the tune of hearts beats
Our blood rushing and  pulse racing
“There’s no music,” I said
You chuckled, pulling me closer as if we weren’t close enough
“Music is you and me ,” you said
I searched your eyes and saw myself in yours " watching you
You stroked my cheek as we stood still
“I love you,” you said
“I love you more”
“Enough to let me go?” you asked
“Why should I let you go?”
“Your world and mine are different now " Let me go,”
Right then,clouds formed in my eyes
As you faded, I came back to my world
“It was a dream,” I murmured. “Or was it?” I sobbed
You beat me

Reviews

[MachinaWriter]

An interesting poem. It had a very strong sense of intrigue, making me wonder more and more about the two characters as I read, leaving me at the end with a hanging question. Good work.

[de_maruf]

lets start

[kublakhan27]

An intriguing mix of drama and poetry...the story and the couple are very mysterious, and almost demand more than one reading for the scene to sink in...well done^^

[InsanityWriter]

This was so sad! But wonderful at the same time. :) Good job.

[Skye]

Beautiful to read :)

[M.M.I]

Very enjoyable. The two characters reminded me of the one's in your story.

[J. Write]

My God! I cant believe you got that...thank you :)

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

Oh my god, this brought tears to my eyes, but this was very well written.

[David Scott]

You wrote a profound poem here. Simple enough for a caual read and deep enough to dive in and enjoy some exploration of the human condition. Well done!

[dunnia]

wow...this is beautiful i love it from beginning to end

[Eudaimoniac]

Very nice. I didn't expect that end. Sad yet wondrous.