You Beat Me

“Let’s play a game,” you said
“What game?” I asked
“Whoever cries first, loses”
“No,” I shook my head
“Come on, one last dance”
I smiled and gave in
You took my hand, and led me to the dance floor
Reluctantly, I followed
Suddenly, we were swinging from side to side
Swinging to the tune of hearts beats
Our blood rushing and  pulse racing
“There’s no music,” I said
You chuckled, pulling me closer as if we weren’t close enough
“Music is you and me ,” you said
I searched your eyes and saw myself in yours " watching you
You stroked my cheek as we stood still
“I love you,” you said
“I love you more”
“Enough to let me go?” you asked
“Why should I let you go?”
“Your world and mine are different now " Let me go,”
Right then,clouds formed in my eyes
As you faded, I came back to my world
“It was a dream,” I murmured. “Or was it?” I sobbed
You beat me

Reviews

[Fictioneer]

A very powerful poem; great work!

[J. Write]

Thank you for reading.

[Ohhhwillow]

This brought tears to my eyes, very beautiful, I can really feel the perfection of the moment.. Wow

[J. Write]

Thank you for reading and your kind review.

[Jo March]

Very sweet, lovely imagery.

[Horizon K.]

Sad and dreamy... Like a prologue for a tragic love story

[J. Write]

Thank you for reading.

[Gray Witch]

Simple. Poignantly anxious. Nice work!

[J. Write]

Thank you for reading.

[Ahmad Cox]

Aww. It was beautiful with a tinge if sadness

[J. Write]

Thank you for reading.

[Abdur Raqeeb]

A touching poem! The ending was sad but good. The fact that you portrayed everything in such a simple way is what makes this piece very well written.

[J. Write]

Thank you for reading, and reviewing.

[Soul Fire]

Bittersweet simplicity, thank you for sharing.

[J. Write]

Thank you for reading.

[Soul Fire]

You're welcome (:

[For Worse]

I really like this. It's sweet and sort of simple. Great work, and keep it up!

[J. Write]

Thank you for reading.