Emerald Jade Universe

Emerald Jade Universe

A Poem by Wrenlane
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This is my first shot @ multiverse...Not sure I how close I came to the target of it's essence but It was fun to write. I am an old school poet, somewhat fettered to rhyme, I gave it my best 1st shot.

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Green was the deepness of the skies…

As was the emerald forest

That filled the expanse, from horizon to horizon. 

Then that sound…

That sound that thundered in my soul!

Was this a dream, I dreadfully mused?

I turned to face the thunderous eurhythmic percussion …

A towering torrent…a waterfall of molten jade,

Assaulting the river below giving to rise to it’s rage!

In a moment of exquisite terror,

I froze in an envious moment of time.

The torrent engulfed the rich green valley,

Lifting me up past the jealous mountain peaks.

My soul was inundated as was the world beneath me.

Where is this place what could it all mean…

Why a world of emerald  jade green?

The tempest quelled...

As I lay floating helpless and supine,

On a sea of emerald green glass…

I gazed up into deepness of the dark green skies.

It was only then I realized…

Upon closer inspection of my own reflection,

I’d been taken captive,

Immersed, baptized, capsized…

Hypnotized, immobilized…

Abandoned and adrift…

In the universe…

…of her green eyes.

© 2016 Wrenlane


Author's Note

Wrenlane
First shot at multiverse, I think.. Give me a shout out & let me know what you think...

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Welcome to WC...

The end was "telling" and precious.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wrenlane

8 Years Ago

Thanks Chris, always appreciate feed back/comments. This was my first shot at multiverse as it is ha.. read more
Chris

8 Years Ago

I think "tradition" is what we make of it anymore...
Ahh the multiverse ... my dad and I often talk about space and the strange goings on out there ... he as the most amazing thinking mind and he always sets my thought patterns in a new directiom. I had always known there was more than this known universe. Well course there is, nothing ever stops at the here and now for we have a long way to travel back back back to the ultimate truth ... but I am rambling ... it is such fondness that I think of conversations shared with my daddio :D

Your words here well yes, we are all abandoned and adrift in this great pool of the everywhen ... I guess the key is to enjoy that adriftness, not worry or possess fear, for everything is but a tiny passing moment.

I feel your work here can be written and read very nicely as a prose piece instead of traditional poetry form. I would also like to see you lose the line 'damn this dream what could it mean' i reckon in poetry everything is but a dream and nothing needs explaining :D

I like your descriptiveness jumping all over the great span of it all and I particularly like your ending X

Posted 8 Years Ago


KWP

8 Years Ago

the dream line to me made everything that come before 'unreal', imaginary even ... I don;t think you.. read more
Wrenlane

8 Years Ago

Okay KWP...I get your point, hopefully this will unPOOF you and you can shed 'the gone effect'! Thi.. read more
KWP

8 Years Ago

i like it :)

yes its Autumn, has been since March 1 ..

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Added on March 18, 2016
Last Updated on April 6, 2016
Tags: Multiverse, symbolisim

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Wrenlane
Wrenlane

Tampa, FL



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I am about to retire from law enforcement after 17 years, a 12 year Army vet. I reside in Tampa with my wife of 43 years, where we raised 2 girls. and are now blessed to be apart of helping to raise o.. more..

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