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door echoes the sound of dreams Two worlds blend in eternal fire Pure sorrows
manipulate the darkness Music slumbers the chaos Stars luster
the teachings of wisdom Ashes lightly splatter the moons Clouds
secretly remain Footsteps burn the elderly dawn
Well, if the point is to be confusing, then it's successful :P It's very random and all over the place, which fits with the theme of fantasy and imagination. A creative person's thoughts are often very scattered, and this is why many of us are so bad at being organized :P
Well, if the point is to be confusing, then it's successful :P It's very random and all over the place, which fits with the theme of fantasy and imagination. A creative person's thoughts are often very scattered, and this is why many of us are so bad at being organized :P
It is confusing, but since you said that is the point, I think you did it well! I like the format. It kind of gives the whole poem a literal wave feel to it, forcing the reader to constantly feel in motion. Helps add to the confusion :-)
I'm a Nerd, who is an avid reader with a peculiar attraction to Literature, specifically, Fantasy, Mystery, Sci-fi, Comics books (Marvel comic books), Manga and Horror.
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