maybe the moon?

It's a poem about how the moon doesn't realise its beauty just like you don't

Maybe the moon too feels alone,
With all the stars
Shining on their own.
Maybe it sees a
Million vibrant hearts together
And it's all alone.
How the moon needs the sun
To light, unlike the stars.
Maybe the moon
Feels lost in the dark.
But does it know how many
People admire
The moon's beautiful attire,
Maybe the moon doesn't know
Just like you don't
And I'm so tired of seeing you low
Thinking you're on your own.
But you're the moon, for I'll be the sun,
You are the hope in the dark
That a million people desire
You have so much beauty inside of you,
Darling don't you know?

Author's Note

This is my first ever poem, so please ignore the fact that it doesn't rhyme. And I just beginning to write after years of reading poetry. I'm looking forward to improve and write better ones, so I'm free to any tips on how to write a poem 🫶🏻

Reviews

[Green]

Despite what a certain individual around here likes to spout, there is no right or wrong way to write a poem, and this is a pretty great first one. It's quite a charming little love poem. And I don't think it needs to rhyme either. It kind of works for it that it doesn't, at least for me.
This was a kind of personification of the moon that I don't see a lot of (I've never actually seen it before, but I've hardly read everything ever written), wondering if it's lonely up there in the sky reflecting back the light of others. But it is beautiful too and deserves to be acknowledged for that. It makes such a good metaphor.

[Aarti Sriram]

Hello "from the poets desk",
I read your poetry and really enjoyed the topic. The metaphor is striking and the body and flow of the piece are both emphatic and creative. The person to whom it is dedicated will surely appreciate themselves more after reading your lines and recognize how beautiful they are, as well as how much you value them.

“Maybe the moon
Feels lost in the dark.
But does it know how many
People admire”
For a lover, this poem serves as a beautiful simile to express affection. For someone who struggles to value their own beauty, this piece can be very relatable. The lines offer a pleasant comparison that encourages reflection.

How the moon needs the sun
To light, unlike the stars.
For a child reader, this teaches that the moon needs sunlight and cannot shine on its own. It also reminds us that there are plenty of other stars in the sky, each with its own light.

Maybe it sees a
Million vibrant hearts together
This one is particularly very insightful. We always think of our sorrow and fail to see the other perspectives, here the poet is considering the fact that moon is looking at the love between people on the earth and feeling lonely among all the shining stars.

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Poems don't need to rhyme! The important thing is the message, the emotion, and the way the words are organized. Keep writing; you will become better every time.