Climb or not to Climb

When one lives falsely, the road to redemption starts at the bottom of a steep ladder whose top can not be seen.

A never ending game of seek

Yet only one hides

From fears, and tears and misguided steps

Upon the penitent sands

Little looks, little glances from that cage of life

Outward onto what could have been

 

The past’s steps have vanished

Long into the dust of another existence

A far larger world had opened

The outcast left upon that deserted day

Only the blind and bound remained

Still trapped by false reason

 

While the golden sun may still yet burn

The sunset and sunrises pulsate with glory

The memories will soon fade

As is how it should be

The magic, no longer a source of light

Replaced with the insult of one who was never true

 

Forgiveness is a given

But not so, the fact of actions, cruel

One’s guilty pangs surely great

Perhaps a learning lesson of fate

Redemption sits alone

Upon the first rung of a ladder that’s steep

Reviews

[Admiral Kirk]

I don't know why, but I thought this poem rhymed. Then I looked at it again, and, heh... :P Great form... Or, ability to use lack of form...

So, judging by the first stanza, I'd say that this person is setting off on their journey, or rather considering it, in their mind. "Little looks, little glances from that cage of life; outward onto what could have been" is really powerful... Not sure why... It seems that this stanza speaks of deep regrets, and memories... Nostalgia...

And the second stanza! GENIUS! Heh, 'deserted day'... Sounds like this poor fellow is stuck in the past. How sad. This guy needs to learn to let go, I take it... Forget this stuff and take that road to redemption... Beautiful...

Hah! I knew it! The third stanza clearly states, "the memories will soon fade; as is how it should be"!!! So I was right! This dude DOES need to forget! HUZZAH! Anyway, this stanza is also genius... Completely genius... 'one who was never true'... That confuses me... Perhaps something that never happened? That should have happened? Hmm...

Oh, this one's got a rhyme in it. Cool... This last stanza is quite powerful as well... And it wraps up the theme! Excellent work! :P

[Wolfwind]

So, do I fall out of my chair now or later in shock at how fabulous of a review you just left! Thank you! You're view points are always eye opening for me, often pointing out things that I hadn't even seen in my own ink. You are the best! =)

[Admiral Kirk]

Haha, you're very welcome. :) You do that to my writing too... You leave a review and tell me things I don't even know about my own poem, lol... :P Haha, thanks. You're the best too. :D

[Shy Girl]

Lately I've found so many connections within your writings to pieces of my world that is spinning round me. This poem is no exception. Though I'm not sure just how to put my connection with this one into actual words to explain. Allusion is what comes to my mind. It's all an allusion that it has worked out...an allusion that we feel like we have indeed reached the top rung. An allusion is what I see. In acknowledging the allusion is the first step up the many rungs comprising that steep ladder of living. (just allusion screams at me...not sure why) :)

[Wolfwind]

I don't think i'd considered the word Allusion as something that might pertain to this ink, but it does bring out a different view that I had not seen. As always I appreciate your view points on the ink! =)