Walls

The Current one man band i have is called Jericho though nothing i write actually has few biblical ties though there are a lot in the mythology like the second song im writing call Valkyrie

Band: Sounds Like Ramen

Song: walls

Album name: Valkyrie

(In away i look back,

Shattered and broken within,

When walls so proud

Before everything caved in,)

I fell,

Deeper into the pit of despair,

Looking back at the window shattering,

Tomorrow,

Is just the husk of an empty promise,

Wasting away from within,

So let me go,

Back to a memory,

i use to live,

NO!

You cannot help me,
You cannot save me,

From my pain, oh

(As My walls fall down,

As my mind wastes away,

As an empty promise makes everything seem sane,

I look back at  a time when there were walls so proud,

Before the trumpets horn and a crumbling sound,)

You wasted my life,

You’ve broken me down,

As i look at my life,

And Nothing was sound,

(As my walls fall down)

You cannot hold me back no longer!

I have come to take back my life!

(to embrace the insanity and let everything in!)

As Walls fall down,

As i waste away,

I smile as my fear starts to waste away,

(never let it go)

As the trumpets sound,

As as my world falls down,

As my pain is gone and the shadow’s come!

Brimstone and fire

in a Heart full of fury

Letting everything sink in!

(There's a lion in my head, keeping the darkness at bay,

But as the roof caves in, and my walls waste away

When Hell folds over, and washes away the sane

As they all tumble down leaving me to blame)

And the shadows cast you aside,

There’s nothing but the empty feeling,

As i slowly sink deeper,

As my walls cave in

Reviews

[apennylate]

This is hella' dope...! Thank you so much for reaching out and sharing... Lions in my head and walls caving away as blame tumbles and shadows cast me aside... Brimstone and fury went into this fantastic ride of lyrical skill... With shattering power this swept aside my despair... Superbly penned...

[FireHawke57]

question but first I want that cat... I mean it's an awesome cat... second thanks im always looking for reviews on stuff so would you recommend me to others

[apennylate]

Haha, he is a love, that is for sure... Love my puppy and baby girl kitty just as much, as well... My pleasure, sorry for the delayed response... I would highly recommend anyone who has commented on my most recent works... They seem to be bright, engaging folks...

[apennylate]

Or my friends list, or search writers cafe for people who also write lyrics, and perhaps reach out... I write rap lyrics... So always happy to help...

[Cœur]

Very rhythmic, I can hear this song in many different genres. The chorus is good, I would listen to this if it were on the radio. Good job.

[Coyote Poetry]

This is very good. I liked the energy of the words and the honest tone of the thoughts shared in the words. You create places and the feel of losing control. I could hear the song in the words.
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[Raj Sahu]

It is just awesome. Keep it up dear! We need such more from you. 😊😊

[revalatia]

Very, very cool. I can see this becoming something bigger.... Cant wait to hear it playing across the air waves. Excellent work. Totally dig it!

[Rimpi Saikia]

Be my lyricist, please!!!! Hehe just kidding but seriously, this is gonna make one hell of a song. Amazingly done, good luck!!

[FireHawke57]

well if I can hear what you're singing sounds like I could write a song...
I do this for fun u know

[FireHawke57]

but thanks I'll keep my lyrics going

[Rimpi Saikia]

Alrighty! All the best!

[CrashQueen♛]

Oh wow, well someone needs a hug! Come here! Oh but in all seriousness this was enjoyable. I am getting a metal type vibe from this but might be because I listen to metal. You need to put this to music, asap.

[FireHawke57]

it's basically metal, think of Old Linkin Park or Desturbed