New Love

Couldn't sleep, felt the urge to write - here is the result...

Single I've been,
These many long years.

Kept out of Love's game,
by my irrational fears.

Yet my proper place was found,
As I stood drying your tears.

"I love you" the words,
Most wondrous to my ears.

Simply here with you,
I find my heart cheers.

Author's Note

not the greatest piece I've ever written, but i think it has potential. It kept fluttering through my head so I couldn't sleep, but I'll look at it after I am rested and maybe I'll tweak it a bit then. Hopefully, you'll have given me lots of feedback by then.

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Wolfe Greytome,

First of all, thank you for reviewing: Hollow. I write only a few pieces I consider to be 'masterpieces.' Anyways, I did like this. It is very unnatural for me to find a piece of writing outside of a read request that I actually like. "Kept out of Love's game by my irrational fears." is probably my best line. I also like how the flow ties it all together. Rhyme is a plus, as always. The poem transitions from a lonely time of being simply because of an unexplainable fear to a happier time where love floats in the air. Whether this is personal or not, this is a great piece. I rate this at a 9.5/10.

Sincerely,
S. W. Scaggs

[Manda]

awww this was so sweet! and cute! i love how u can write so little but express so much! well done!

[deeps]

I like this i think it flows very well and it came from your heart. I think it is a wonderful expressed write flowing with emotion.