The Boiling Man

There was a time when I fell so hard on my knees and I was only 17 when I wrote this. Years later, it's still taunting me, even in my sleep.

 

Shh, Listen...   There's A Man...   Playing An Unusual Violin...

 

With The Strings That Are The Nerves...   And The Veins...   From His Own Arms...

 

How Wonderous The Sounds...   Of The Agonies Made...   By The Slicing And Dicing...

 

Down With The Lambs...   Up With The Larks...

 

Run To The Beds, Children...   Before It Gets Dark...

 

Around, Around The Sun We Go...   As The Moon Goes Around Us...

 

While The Parts Of Us Are Dying...   In The Slow And The Painful Ways...

 

We Do Not Die Of Death...   We Die Of The Vertigo...

 

Run, Dying Breeds, Run...   Like There's No Time...   And No Tomorrow...

 

Yet, We're All Still Gonna Die One Way...   Or Another...   No Matter What...

 

And I Just Saw The Dead...   Small And Great...  Stand Before The God...

 

I Witnessed The Blood Of The Christ...   Dripping On All Of Their Skins...

 

This Is Just Another Altar...   Inside The Church...   Of The Fears And The Pains...

 

Now, I Know Why Jesus Wept...

 

Author's Note

This writing was inspired by James O'Barr, the creator of "The Crow"... (Thanks, James)

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

This i found to be a unique read. It's different format cause my mind to spin around alot like the images that you presented.
I liked how it was heart felt. The feelings of dispare and helplessness, seemed to fling out like and open blender.
Good read!
Thanks for sharing!

[Rain]

Great uniqueness. I love the tangeled feel in places, and you make your point so clear. You can't out slick death...outsmart it...checkmate it. Very interesting style. I liked it. Rain..

[Catrinka]

This is a strong poem, wonderfully written - I love the message, love the images, a thought-provoking piece - KUDOS! The last line especially is a home run!

[Kimmee Jean]

O.O...wow...awestruck...

[Valentine]

Joseph.I realy like this one..Deep at the beginning and so full of man's inner pain, like why on earth am I here..and then.falling to ones knees and feeling Christ's pain..as took upon His body all of my sins and the world's sins..He wept over Lazarus..how much more did He weep over us?..God bless..Valentine

[Kelsey]

A few spelling errors, but otherwise a great poem.

[angelina neves]

I like the begining! then it gets to religious...
Death is a natural part of life, like drinking and loving and growing... and although it is very sad to see love ones go... and to think how many are killed just for the pleasure of the lords of violence and war...
"Run, Dying Breeds, Run... Like There's No Time... And No Tomorrow..." there is no tomorrows, just the todays we make (and for me there is no sense in runing! Today is a day to live the most beautiful way we can!)
:)
hugs
angi

[Princess_ck84]

Brutally wonderful!!

Might want to look over your wording / grammar ("Oh, How Wonder The Sounds" - wonderous, "In The Slow And The Painfully Ways" - painful) it detracts from the great flow you are establishing with your word choice and use of elipseses.

I can also see the inspiration throughout... great job!

[K]

I think that your form worked well with the rhythm of this piece. It made the flow and the theme come together nicely. I also love the first image that you present of the man playing himself as a violin. It's brilliant! Great job!

[Rodwonder]

Great syncopation, and the subject is deep... Definitly different and that's what I like about it!!!

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I like the "�" format very much. It's fresh and works well. The all beg. caps was unique, but a little distracting (confused me more than once). I was extremely impressed up to "moon goes around us" and then you lost me. (I don't know O'barr, so that may be why.?) It felt less melodious and more abstract after that. And I had wanted to hear more about the violin man; that was a really fresh concept. I really liked all of the images throughout though. "Run To The Beds, Children... Before It Get Dark..." was my fav. Your grammar is also very pleasingly unique � "the" repetition. On the whole; it opened my mind. Good write!