The Boiling Man

There was a time when I fell so hard on my knees and I was only 17 when I wrote this. Years later, it's still taunting me, even in my sleep.

 

Shh, Listen...   There's A Man...   Playing An Unusual Violin...

 

With The Strings That Are The Nerves...   And The Veins...   From His Own Arms...

 

How Wonderous The Sounds...   Of The Agonies Made...   By The Slicing And Dicing...

 

Down With The Lambs...   Up With The Larks...

 

Run To The Beds, Children...   Before It Gets Dark...

 

Around, Around The Sun We Go...   As The Moon Goes Around Us...

 

While The Parts Of Us Are Dying...   In The Slow And The Painful Ways...

 

We Do Not Die Of Death...   We Die Of The Vertigo...

 

Run, Dying Breeds, Run...   Like There's No Time...   And No Tomorrow...

 

Yet, We're All Still Gonna Die One Way...   Or Another...   No Matter What...

 

And I Just Saw The Dead...   Small And Great...  Stand Before The God...

 

I Witnessed The Blood Of The Christ...   Dripping On All Of Their Skins...

 

This Is Just Another Altar...   Inside The Church...   Of The Fears And The Pains...

 

Now, I Know Why Jesus Wept...

 

Author's Note

This writing was inspired by James O'Barr, the creator of "The Crow"... (Thanks, James)

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

This i found to be a unique read. It's different format cause my mind to spin around alot like the images that you presented.
I liked how it was heart felt. The feelings of dispare and helplessness, seemed to fling out like and open blender.
Good read!
Thanks for sharing!

[Adam Greenfield]

Powerful piece. The set up is very different but that completely lends itself to the originality of this piece. It also aids in getting the feel and emotion across; stunted sentences can really be powerful in their brevity and I think you definitely accomplished that here.

Great write!

[The Archangel Gabriel]

I really like this work! You know why Jesus wept? Why didn't he? Don't get me started! :)

I like all the Christian allusions. I think that I am going to write a piece with a bunch of Muslim references because I am probably up to about 94% Christian allusions while being Muslim.

I need to get back to my heritage, and I want to respond to the arguably terrorist car bombing of an alleged terrorist by Israel who apparently won't even fess up to it. How do you get people to stop the terrorist bombings when you are also doing them? That just sort of incites more of the same. Did the 2006 Shi'ite shrine bombing not teach people that such flagrant acts tend to bring about long patterns of retribution?

-Gabe

[Gary H]

Nice piece of creative writing and always interesting to see how someone is inspired by another. Like the way you have laid this out, very thoughtful and getting maximum impact from the lines. The last line says everything and I think in some ways appears a revelation in the poem.

[George Love]

Very unique setup and the inspiration is veyr evident. Well written

[Sara Muschweck]

What a wonderful write, the structure was amazing, and the poem itself was so full of emotion, Great write.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

a little bid of grateful dead influence, too, perhaps? hehe around the sun made me think of them. :)

"We Do Not Die Of Death... We Die Of The Vertigo..."

i love that line the best.

i like the setup too. it's different, but it worked for what you were trying to say. a little obtuse at times, but that's a personal choice. :)

rock on.

hugs

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Nicely done, enjoyed reading this. I like how it was written too, it's different.


Great Write.

[Stacy]

I like what you've written.

[Marie]

Never heard of it, but this was an excellent write. Thanks for sharing.