Eden Lost

It's pretty obvious what it's about once you read it... Almost makes me feel bad, but I'll deal with the fallout when it hits.

No two men could be more opposite,

So why do I see him in your eyes?

And you in his?

 

Beneath his black-haired,

Brown-eyed face

I see your golden blueness.

 

Superimposed over your

Delicate lightness

Is his strong, sturdy dark.

 

With you, I feel a trusted traitor.

With him, a cherished secret.

Why can't I choose?

 

You stayed by my side,

Raised me out of the water

That tried to swallow me whole.

 

He left me alone

In my time of need.

But he's here and fighting now.

 

Both kisses thrill me.

Both embraces are comforting steel.

Both hearts beat my name in a steady tattoo.

 

How I wish one of you would despise me

At the cost of my joy

If only it would allay your pain.

 

I want to make my home with you.

My future glows inside of your eyes,

A lifetime of waking up in your arms.

 

I want to burn the world to the ground with him.

Funeral pyres and burning pillars

As we crash into each other every night till the end of time itself.

 

So please, my Angel of Light,

My Purity, my Salvation,

My only hope

 

Hate me.

Let the only feeling that accompanies my name

Be pure, unadulterated loathing.

 

Let me set myself aflame

As you move on to someone worthy of your love

And I perish in the inferno that began when I took the apple of temptation.

Author's Note

Please try to ignore what it's about and focus on the work itself...

Reviews

[Shellie]

My God, this is fantastic.... yeah i know what you man by not wanting an analysis... i dont bother with that as i find i myslf may write bout pain but not be feeling it at that moment..mayb a reflection of a time past and somone comes along ignores your piece and says oh itll get better, the pain wll go away Grrrr...i no its all with good intention but this is WRITERS CAFE not SHRINK SHACK f**k sake.

Now.....dramas over. This is really really great the writing is superb and if i start pickin parts i loved i shall be a hypocritical analysist so i wont because i love the whole thing[incl the message] great work...top marks and most df a favourite