Something Wrong with Me

I am dead 

I no longer feel

It has been forever 

And I fear to live again

Some may think it strange

But I often figure being dead is best

If I can no longer feel

You can no longer hurt me

Everyone around me alive

With hopes and dreams 

Living their life to the fullest

Wedding here

Baby there

No it's not for me

I try to stay clear

But you don't see 

I've died inside

He talks of marriage

Starts to descibe a baby

I turn away cooly

I go to my room 

Curl into a ball

I begin to cry

The tears flow down my face

I can't picture living

I  no longer dream

I'm too afraid 

To come back to life

I paint my smile on

I go through the motions

A fake laugh here and there

Theres too much pain

I mask it as often as I can

I don't want you to know

I don't want you to see

That there is something wrong with me

Reviews

[SquinklaPsyOps]

The character in the poem describes a relationship that doesnt make her feel alive anymore as if the other person doesnt turn her on or touches her anymore, something about the other person that is making her unhappy and at the same time might be afraid to get out of the relationship because it may not be expected from society and that has her lock.

[FlatLineBeauty]

Wow, you are really good at reading deeply between the lines and you hit the nail on the head.

[Rob Santana]

Nothing is wrong, I can relate to the line " I paint my smile on" damn I do that just about everyday. For me, I don't think anything is wrong with me. I'm just being me. I'm comfortable with myself. Deep writing, well penned.

[FlatLineBeauty]

Thank you very much

[koty bell]

I just wanna say that sweetie... Trust .me when i say nothing wrong with u.... Ur kind funny cute Adora ble and down to earth....ur amazing just the way u....r and pardon me for stealing shakespeare but u r a more fairer lady then even Juliet;)

[FlatLineBeauty]

thank you! :3 D'awh

[koty bell]

huh? Lolzzz

[FlatLineBeauty]

awe.... lol

[koty bell]

Miuuuuuah!#big kizz# :O

[I Am Svetlana]

It's honestly scary and gut-wrenching to know how horrible and hurtful people can be. As well as having no emotions or feel no reason to apologize for those hurtful things. I know how it feels to care so much about someone, only to have them push you away and act like you're nothing important. As if you never meant anything to them, that you were just "there." It's sick how people put their buried pain upon others and nearly push them over the edge. People really need to think before they act, more or less open their mouths to speak.

[FlatLineBeauty]

thank you. seems you peeked the whole way down to my core

[I Am Svetlana]

People are just disgusting these days. It's time for them to grow up and take responsibility for their actions.

[I Am Svetlana]

And you're welcome! Glad I am here to understand :)

[4$H]

Well done! The way you have carried the flow is beautiful!!

[FlatLineBeauty]

thank you!

[Antoñyo]

Ah, the passing hells as we live and grow...survive and see the light.

Thanks for the share

[William J. Marsh]

Wow that is a really beautifully touching piece of work. It will touch a lot of people in this world that we live in today. I have been around a while and young people of today have so much on their shoulders it causes a lot of confusion it seems.

[MoriartyMesa]

The work wants to echo in, but the subtext is a bit more. Like a scene in a movie when you see someone as cool as s**t light up a smoke on a Plane. He looks up and say's, "What put this out, go f**k yourself!" I feel a Sexy Beast, not a timid soul. The beast is just waiting to get out.

[FlatLineBeauty]

hahaha, thank you. In a way you are right, about my inner beast. I guess in a way i wanna remain dead in certain areas of my life but not all as my inner bad a*s breaks out.

[Relic]

I can certainly identify with this. I'm a little bit older than you are and I can tell you I struggle to keep my sanity. I've often thought of myself as the walking dead. I have decades of regret but there's only one way to go which is forward. My future is unknown and I wonder how long I'll be here. But as for you, you still have plenty of time ahead of you. Something I don't have.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Starts to descibe a baby
I turn away cooly
I go to my room
Curl into a ball
I begin to cry
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Starts to describe a baby
I turn away coolly
I go to my room
Curl into a ball
I begin to cry

Let's get the fun stuff out of the way...editing...This is between venting and a verse...I see the parts in there, which wants me to think so and not so...

but back to the line of this...I see how you write this in a toss and folly...with what everyone else is doing and then what you're doing...makes for a whirl wind of a write...

[FlatLineBeauty]

yeah it was a whirl wind write. i just put it together in a few minutes i was just feeling it. I write what i feel..