Hatred

Sometimes when we hate someone, we just want them to burn.

I don't wish to see you
I don't wish to hear you
I don't wish to feel you

Burn in fire

I hope no one hears you
I hope no one sees you 
I hope no one comes to you 
I hope no one saves you

Bleed

Scream louder
Cry louder
Beg for mercy
Plead for your life

May the hellhounds devour you

Author's Note

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Reviews

[ASandyRabbit]

Phew. Even if this wasn't titled I'd be able to feel the emotion. I think that's one thing I struggle with in writing: communication my feelings through it. So good job at being better than me there. ^_^

I like how the last line is separated from the others with the smaller font. I realize that may be a formatting error, but it works well actually.

If I had to make criticisms, it feels like the second four lines (which begin with "I hope no one") could have more powerful verbs. Maybe replace the fourth line with, "I hope no one cares," for example.

I'm generally a big fan of repetition in poetry at the moment, so I like seeing this in your poem, but because of the way it's done there's no room for any rhyming. This isn't bad per se. A lot of the poems I write have no rhyme scheme whatsoever. But, maybe getting things to rhyme could help improve your writing. This may be a silly criticism since your other poems might rhyme, I have not read them yet. That's just my first impression.

Overall, good job communicating a feeling. I'm envious.

[Winter]

Thank you for the review :). One of the problem for me is to make things rhyme.

[Gee]

Hate is just wasted energy my friend.

[Winter]

True but it is better to get rid of it in a safer method rather on someone else.

[Gee]

Even better to not bother with that particular emotion...