Compassion

A little something that me and my classmate came up with for our poster.

This is a wicked world

Where people are doomed

When people are struggling

Do not give them your moolahs

Do not give them your pity

Instead give them your love

Author's Note

Edit: add in 'your' before moolah
Please comment

Reviews

[ASandyRabbit]

Out of curiosity, what made you use the word "moolahs" instead of money? It interests me.

Reading the previous review, I have to disagree actually. It reads better as "Do not give them your pity / Instead give them your love" since the lines are more parallel that way, and the second serves as a direct rebuttal to the first. In fact, I think it might read better if you ADDED the word "your" before moolahs, (making the line, "Do not give them your moolahs") so it would match the last two lines and stay consistent with the meter.

[Winter]

It was written for a school work and my teacher suggests moolah since I used the word cash which didn't sound very nice. Thanks for your review :D

[ASandyRabbit]

That's an interesting choice! It sounds nice. I feel like one of my issues in things I write is that my vocabulary is kind of small, not because I don't know many words but because I just don't think of them.

[Winter]

Same here. When I get stumped I take out a thesaurus and start looking through it.

[anne elizabeth]

Very nice, I think it would read more profoundly without the "your" before pity and love. However, this could just me the way I've read it. Thank you for sharing.

[Winter]

Thanks for the review :D