Again, is this poetry? How's the emotion, how's the imagery? Please know that I'm not trying to write words soaked in pain alone, so if it's coming across that way let me know. And of course any other comments you have are welcome. Thanks.
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i like the theme of this...one suggestion is the blood imagery/metaphor...you carry it through two stanzas, but maybe bring it back at the end.
Mainly with poetry it is important to be cohesive---use only as many words as needed to express an idea, and in doing so...when imagery, allegory, or metaphor is used...instead of just reading like a list of them, have them connect all the way through the poem.
i used to use them randomly and an editor of a magazine in a rejection pointed that out to me.
you have lots of good lines, imagery etc.
just work on tightening up...carrying through...and you are spot on.
i like the theme of this...one suggestion is the blood imagery/metaphor...you carry it through two stanzas, but maybe bring it back at the end.
Mainly with poetry it is important to be cohesive---use only as many words as needed to express an idea, and in doing so...when imagery, allegory, or metaphor is used...instead of just reading like a list of them, have them connect all the way through the poem.
i used to use them randomly and an editor of a magazine in a rejection pointed that out to me.
you have lots of good lines, imagery etc.
just work on tightening up...carrying through...and you are spot on.
Yes, it's definitely poetry. Poetry, in my opinion, is simply the conveyance of feelings, moments, secret things, in an artistic way. It serves to let people know that those thoughts and feelings that they don't share with others are not so strange after all. When done properly, not too much, not too little, I think it's a beautiful way to let people know that they're not alone. Well done.
This is poetry. The imagery is good. It is filled with pain but I feel like it is more a poem about discovery and trying to find answers. I think you ask questions and struggle with things that everyone has to try to figure out. Good job with this. I am excited to read more from you.