Dark Heart

A poem about broken dreams, although NOT mine!

Dark Heart

 

 

My heart is broken

into a million pieces

 

Bleeding all over the

the dreams I once had

 

Nothing but pain, loss

and betrayal will I ever feel

 

Why did you have to ever do it

with no warning, not even a care

 

You left me standing in my white dress

at the church, in front of all those people

 

Walking out tall with your head held proud

it was as if you had nothing in your heart at all

 

Your heart and soul must be empty and dark inside

be off with you, I want no one of that kind in my life

 

 

9/3/08  Windy

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

As hardy as they may be, hearts are so easily broken. Just something that popped into my head. This is NOT about me. ;) Comments are welcome as always.

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

A stong poem dealing with a powerful emotion. I loved the form! It reminded me of a tree in one aspect, the whole standing tall bit. on the flip side of that, I saw it as a mass of some goo driping to the floor, like the blood of a broken heart.

My only suggestion would be to capitalize the beginning of every line.

Great Write!
Much Love,
Aaron

[Meredith Leigh]

I agree, hearts ARE easily broke, and I thought this poem portrayed it very well. it was a lovley write, filled with a lot of emotion, it's hard to believe it's not about you! It's just that heartfelt. Anyways, great write!!

- Kriss

[Legion]

I like this. I also like the way you formatted it. Kind of resembles a wedding dress. Kudos.

[Mr. Lopez]

Not your poem or not your story? LOL I absolutely loved the structure/presentation. Almost like a representation that symbolizes the growth of a tree from a bad experience. Hard story to live through no matter who it happened to . Great work .

Mr.Lopez