PUZZLED

Another late night, early morning ramble...Hope you enjoy!

 

PUZZLED

 

I'M PUZZLED ABOUT CERTAIN THINGS...

 

ABOUT THE OCEAN AND THE TREES

 

THE STORY OF THE BIRDS AND BEES,

 

WHY THE MALE PREDICTS THE SEX OF A CHILD

 

WHY A WOMANS LIFE IS SO MUCH HARDER,

 

WHY DOGS BARK AND CATS MEOW

 

WHY MEN HAVE A PENIS AND WOMAN A VAGINA,

 

WHY SOME FOLKS FLIRT WHILE OTHERS ARE SHY

 

WHY PEOPLE WONDER ABOUT YOU AND I,

 

WHY THE COLOR OF THE SKY IS BLUE

 

ITS NO WONDER I'M PUZZLED IF I HAVE NOTHING BETTER TO DO

 

8/18/08  

WINDY

Author's Note

Hope the colors don't throw you off to much. Just having a bit of fun with my own mind! Feel free to comment as always. ;)

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What fun and what questions or comments to mull over for the remainder of 2008!

I've often wondered why, on the morning of a special even/occasion, we suddenly have a blemish! Or, why does it rain all through your own holidays then, brighten up the day after you return home? Why do you never have your camera with you when something wonderful occurs, appears! There could be more

Anyway, the things you've come up with are really you, and, great fun. Love the: WHY THE MALE PREDICTS THE SEX OF A CHILD - 'cos shouldnt women have the choice seeing as tho we're going to be doing the hard work!

Oh darn it, now you have me going!. Your post has put a real smile in my thinking. Thank you for sharing

[Poeticme]

Very nice, I hung on every line:-), love the imagery


Poeticme

[KateD]

What a lovely poem! Although the questions sound like those of a child, an impression that is supported by the colours you uses, those are mostly questions we are sometimes still asking ourselves, aren't they? So, if those are the questions of a child, maybe we all still have a little child within ourselves that can't help but ask those silly questions we don't dare ask out loud for fear of being called stupid.

[ODMK {Oliver D.M King]]

Holy crap, I actually LOVED this poem, it was thoughtful, brilliant (in colour too!) and all around just wonderful to read. It was a little slanty though hehe but it was epic, now I have all those questions running through my brain.

Great stuff.

[Ms. Ella M]

luv the font and colors and the vein of thoughts- would really luv even more the answers ...
nice line of rambling...
find sumthin 2 du girl!

[Sarah B.]

it sounds like a fun poem, i agree, the colours do throw you off a bit. i'd make it a little more serious and write it in regular text and take out some of the direct words like penis and vagina, and place them with words more subtle, and do something with the line about the birds and the bees, it's almost a cliche. the poem then may not sound as light and airy but a little more structured and give the reader something more to think about :)

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

To say the least, the colors were an excellent touch!

This piece was quite cute.. I loved the flow of your words and your questions, though somewhat mainstream, were unique in their own way.

Thanks for the RR, I greatly enjoyed reading this piece!

[Emily Rose]

Aww, cute! The colors didn't throw me off, but I found the font a little hard to read. Maybe it was the italics?

You certainly hit on some great puzzles of the universe, but I'm a little confused by your rhyme scheme. Sometimes you rhyme for a few lines and then you just stop for a line or two and then fall back into your scheme. Is there some reason that you're doing this? Are you trying to call attention to certain lines?

This made me smile!

[Belinda Rice]

NO THE COLORS DID NOT THROUGH ME OFF LOL THIS IS A GREAT POEM TOO CAUSE ALOT OF PEOPLE ARE PUZZLED ABOUT THINGS LIKE THIS ON EARTH...WE ALWAYS HAVE SOME KIND OF QUESTION TO WHY WE WERE MAD TO BE WHO WE ARE OR WHY OR WHY THINGS ARE THE WAY THAT THEY ARE....YOU HIT THIS RIGHT ON THE HEAD CAUSE I DONT THINK I COULD HAVE SAID IT ANY BETTER...GREAT JOB AGAIN YOU GET MY HIGH RATING FOR THIS ONE,,,

[Lyrical Love]

The colors did shock me at first, but then I was diggin' it! Nice write...I wonder too, why they get the dicks!

[Marina]

I.Love.This.