REAL LIFE

Life mixed with dreams...

Real Life

 

I find myself in lands of fantasy

in far off places, just you and me

Places outside of regular life

where there is no such thing

as crime or strife

Worlds full of wonder and glee

things to do, places to see

No rich, no poor, no poverty

Just oceans of green, skies of blue

sunshiny days and time with you

We would do well to remember

to enjoy our stay as it will be short

just until the next morn, then back

to the real world of murders,

suicides & dark drizzly days

Tomorrow will bring all new things

love, hope, joy and lots of new

wonderful dreams

We hope...

 

8-13-08

Windy

Author's Note

Trying something a little different. Please feel free to comment. It's how I learn! Thanks :)

Reviews

[Dani California]

Tomorrow will bring all new things
love, hope, joy and lots of new
wonderful dreams

We hope...


I love that stanza Windy! Love it!
How uplifting and positive --
Life truly is what we make it --
Dreams are only as far as our imagination --
Which makes them even closer
to us then what's going on around us --

Lovely work! Just lovely! :)

[ODMK {Oliver D.M King]]

Very good work Wendy I do enjoy reading your poerty! I liked this one, it takes me someplace which is what a good piece of literature is supposed to do.

Kudos my friend!

[KateD]

This is an amazing piece of poetry, Windy. I guess it depends on the reader's mood while reading, how he or she takes it. For me, it sounds very sad right now, with real life being such a bleak and painful thing and people just living through their dreams.
On the other hand, as Dani said, one might find the thought of what the new day might bring comforting and uplifting.
Such a powerful piece that makes me think about life and dreams and hope and despair. Well done!

Kate

[Ms. Ella M]

nice contrast of font and thought, reel fan ta z though...

[Sarah B.]

quite a pretty poem~

[closed]

My, my I loved this poem very much!


"Tomorrow will bring all new things

love, hope, joy and lots of new

wonderful dreams

We hope..."


How true.


~mmg~

[Sid]

"Tomorrow will bring all new things

love, hope, joy and lots of new

wonderful dreams

We hope..."

The end of a poem is really good ....showing a ray of hope nd ....a felling to be an optimist

[Belinda Rice]

Brovo another great poem and can I ask what kind of writing that you used I like it alot, and not only that it added that special touch to your poem.Very lovly peice cause your right about the strive on this earth and the crime rate and everything that is going on in this life, you are right on target with the worlds strife.....good job..again koodo's my friend..

[Blue Sky]

I love the fantasy image you words convey so beautiful
the form with the different fonts is quite effective

in far off places, just you and me



No rich, no poor, no poverty


Just oceans of green, skies of blue

sunshiny days and time with you


Worlds full of wonder and glee

things to do, places to see


No rich, no poor, no poverty


Just oceans of green, skies of blue

sunshiny days and time with you


and true


We would do well to remember

to enjoy our stay as it will be short

just until the next morn, then back


and yet still...


Tomorrow will bring all new things

love, hope, joy and lots of new

wonderful dreams



These are just wonderfully worded, a most excellent piece!!

[Poets Soul]

I liked the style, it worked well with this poem TY PS

[O!]

HAHAHA...I like the very subtle 'we hope' in the end!!......it finishes off the poem real well!!.....

so true! for so many.

different was good! :-)

x,
O!