Love & pain

It is pretty much what you have to go through if you fall for the wrong person.

When I tell you,
And I tell you it's true,
The nearest and the dearest,
Have hurt me too.

But love and pain are
Never Exclusive of one another
And neither one ever,
Leaves the side of the other.

For the path to love
Is through the valley of pain.
With the misery of heart
It's roads are lain.

Reviews

[Jennie Lynn]

Heck I think you go through this even if you fall for the right person lol.

I actually liked this better than the first I read. The rhythm is much more consistent, you vary up the syllables in each line which makes it more interesting to read, esp aloud.

I like the imagery of love and pain being a couple themselves, never leaving each other's side. The imager of pain being a valley, in other words a low point.

I really liked this one :)

[Aash]

So that means she could still be the right person?
That's what I hope too.
I am glad you liked it.
Thank you

[S. von Glaubitz]

There are a few things I like about this poem, apart from the subject matter (I'm a firm believer that pain and love are intertwined). It's brief, in that good way that means you didn't say anything extraneous or unnecessary. That also means it's very clear. Anyone can read this, understand it, and relate to it. I also really appreciate poetry that uses punctuation, possibly because I had a favorite teacher who drilled that into me, but also because I think punctuation enhances meaning and can be perfectly expressive in its own right.

That being said, and in the hopes of offering something constructive, I think you can remove the comma in the third line of the second stanza. Grammatically, you don't need it, but you might have added it to encourage a pause.

Thanks for sharing your poetry and keep up the excellent work!

[Aash]

Thank you for the guidance. I too had an excellent teacher. Will try to improve.