Searching

I've been searching for a female not to easy but good enough to comprehend, one that I can read like a book but a book that will never end, and every time I flip a page a new chapter is revealed and secrets are unveiled not curtailed,and the type that is funny not akward but corny and sweet like sugar and honey. That when we talk our conversations are endless like scrolls from the bible; but these scrolls are sacred, and her loyalty to me is beyond extraordinary, just like her precious face that is priceless and her mind is like a dictionary which i love because when we talk her intelligence catches me off guard.The type of female who will encourage me to do good, beat me up when i am up to no good, knows that I am insecure but doesn't mind, because she knows how to read my mind and can take my pain away without me having to sip on any wines. This is  the kinda female I have in mind.

 

Reviews

[Miguel]

Hi, Wilson :)

First of all, glad to have you in the Young Poets group!
I really like this poem because I know that it's from the heart and I can totally relate. There are times I have thoughts like these play around in my head; it's nice to see someone put these thoughts into words.

I also like the unconventional structure you used, where you did not divide everything into lines - it makes it a lot easier and more fluid to read the poem.

I especially like the part:

"The type of female who will encourage me to do good, beat me up when i am up to no good"

It's not often that people think about the less-sweet but none-the-less-important aspects of other people, and I'm glad to see that you kept it real.

Other than occasional grammatical errors, it's a really well-written piece.
Hope you find the right lady in your life!

~Miguel

[Sunkissed Circus]

I like this a lot; not completely my style (but that's not mine to judge), but it fits you very well from what I've read previously. It's got a sort of aesthetic beauty to it; I can easily see it being spoken. I love poems that when you read them, you hear them. This is one of those